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I wrote another essay about believing in luck or work hard fro earn something you want.
Have any of you thought about earning something with your luck? wishing to get your object by believing in luck is not always right. But by achieving what you want by putting your effort in, than the story will be change. However people still do wish on their luck, but I strongly suggest to earn something by hard work not only with a luck.
Firstly people are thinking too much attention to a thing called a luck. For example your test during classes some people are prepared to get a high marks for it but some people are trusting in their luck and by not studying them hoping for them to get at least 60% of their marks. Think about it seriously by getting over 60% by studying them and get it perfectly or just trusting in their luck and hoping their marks to be over 60%. I would rather choose an opportunity to study and get the exact mark I wish to have.
Secondary many people are upses with lottery.A lots of people spend their money to get a million of money from their luck. But the people who wins that lottery are 1% of people. Therefore wishing their luck and by earning money might sometime be wrong people ends up spending hundred of thousand of money in to lottery. I will rather work hard and earn lots of money.
Thirdly people often say that putting an effort to something will always mean something.For example if you are working o a project at your work and you are the leader of the group. If you work hard and try to get something you want. Your boss will think you as an hard working employee which might lead you to an more successful job. Or a important roll to their company.
Although believing in luck is good. But everything isn't just a thing to believe on a luck. There are things that you do not want to trust on a luck.Therefore I strongly agree with the statement of hardworking rather than a luck which sometimes disappoints you,