Undergraduate / Detesting Poetry - UNC (Curiosity led me to somewhere I didn't expect) [2]

well written, feel it answers the prompt well. I like the way the nonchalant mood of the first half of the essay changes as you discover yourself to be come more self assured and strong.

Just some minor changes
'By finally using my words, I began to claim back my individuality, and life backand my life.
'It's funny how the things we detested the most.

well done on finding your voice and good luck on your open mike night.

Undergraduate / Drowning is not an option. John Hopkins U Essay - interests/pursuits/passions/experiences [7]

overall the message of your essay is good but the prompt is somewhat unanswered- how would you build up your interest in john Hopkins.
Also a lot of your sentences are quite clumsy and need to be re written.

"Drowning is not an option."
With that, I was thrown into the seawater, have my stomach filled with every gallon of them and begin to sink faster than a rock.-needs to be clearer. keep the tense in the past, you keep changing it.It was the eighth year of my life that my grandfather attempted to drown me for the first time. - I was eight years old when my grandfather first attempted to drown me.

Undergraduate / 'my foremost passion' - Stanford's Intellectual Vitality, "What is math?" [6]

maybe you dont focus too much on that proof but also talk about how it intrested you that you researched harder proofs and sghow an example that is much more intellectually stimulating than 0=n*0

Undergraduate / I dream of playing soccer; Vanderbilt - extracurricular activities or work experiences [5]

Elaborate on why you like it what it means to you and what it has taught you on a more personal level.

Undergraduate / More unpredictability means more possibility. Stanford supp: What matters to you and why? [3]

its clearer now as to what matters to you but the why is it matters to you is still unclear aslo the last snetence needs to be tweaked a little 'I prefer taking the path less traveled, which gives present less discovered'.