th3pitch3r
Dec 19, 2013
Undergraduate / 'Felt accustomed to this town' - COMMON APP ESSAY [2]
When I read your essay it really gives me the feeling that you are lying. I immediately think that you are trying to make yourself seem like a good person by saying you would be most comfortable in Genesis, Panama, where the only somewhat positive thing you mentioned about it was how the other kids didn't physically abuse you while you were playing soccer. I suggest you rewrite it, because I really I am not getting a sense that you are telling the truth, but more playing off what you think the reader will like in a much too obvious manner. And yes, it does seem like a fairly cliche thing to do. Good luck.
When I read your essay it really gives me the feeling that you are lying. I immediately think that you are trying to make yourself seem like a good person by saying you would be most comfortable in Genesis, Panama, where the only somewhat positive thing you mentioned about it was how the other kids didn't physically abuse you while you were playing soccer. I suggest you rewrite it, because I really I am not getting a sense that you are telling the truth, but more playing off what you think the reader will like in a much too obvious manner. And yes, it does seem like a fairly cliche thing to do. Good luck.
