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Feb 15, 2014
Undergraduate / She stared at the mirror intently; CHALLENGE ESSAY [2]
The question is to state a challenging experience I have faced and explain what I have learned from it. This is quite personal, and I would like some feedback in terms of my grammar and overall quality of the essay. Thank you. (It is not completely finished by the way!)
She stared at the mirror intently, scrutinizing her reflection. Such behavior had become habitual, in which her flaws and imperfections were the only things visible to her. Her mind was a victim of distortion, which caused her to accept the idea that the sole determiner of one's self-worth was a number on a scale. It was evident that this individual was no longer _(name here)_, a young girl that had once been vibrant and spirited, but rather a puppet manipulated by an eating disorder. [..]
The question is to state a challenging experience I have faced and explain what I have learned from it. This is quite personal, and I would like some feedback in terms of my grammar and overall quality of the essay. Thank you. (It is not completely finished by the way!)
She stared at the mirror intently, scrutinizing her reflection. Such behavior had become habitual, in which her flaws and imperfections were the only things visible to her. Her mind was a victim of distortion, which caused her to accept the idea that the sole determiner of one's self-worth was a number on a scale. It was evident that this individual was no longer _(name here)_, a young girl that had once been vibrant and spirited, but rather a puppet manipulated by an eating disorder. [..]