Writing Feedback / [TOEFL] 'Firstly, people want to have more knowledge' - why attend to college or university? [3]

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Topic: People attend college or university for many different reasons (for example, new experiences, career preparation, increased knowledge). Why do you think people attend college or university? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Answer

Studying at universities and colleges are dreams of many people all over the world. Since the historical time, attending university has always been the goal of many high school students. Nowadays, thanks to the globalization, students can not only attend universities or colleges in their own countries but they can apply to many universities which are bigger, more prestigious and more famous in over the world. As a result, there are concerns about the reasons why students apply to study at universities. In my opinion, I believe students wish to be members of universities because of these following reasons.

Firstly, people want to have more knowledge. College students can obtain higher education in a way which is obviously different from it in high schools. Moreover, colleges focus on specific majors, which can help us to approach professional books and study materials. There are people loving chemistry, but there are also others who like to know more about economics. Therefore, they try to attend universities to satisfy their curiousness about this world.

Secondly, studying a particular major at college could give people chances to get good jobs in the future. If they have professional knowledge as well as skills, people will get stable careers and incomes, which is very important to have a wealthy and happy life. On the other hand, with a stable life, people will be able to pursue their other dreams such as travelling around the world - just like me.

Thirdly, I personally think there are people who attend universities because of their family wishes. For example, I have a cousin. She is very intelligent and loves biology. Her wish is that she could be an excellent doctor to help other people. However, she studies accounting because her parents think it is a better job for girls.

Writing Feedback / [TOEFL] Parents are our teachers from the very early time in our life. [6]

Topic: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents are the best teachers. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Answer

Learning is a thing that we do in all of our lives. Getting the best lessons, besides our abilities to self-study, depends on our teachers a lot. There are people who believe that no one else is better than our parents in terms of teachers. I whole-heartedly agree with this opinion because of these following reasons.

Firstly, parents are our teachers from the very early time in our life. As we were born, parents taught us from the very little things such as how to smile, how to walk to the ordinary routines such as eating. Moreover, when we grow bigger, they teach us many fairy tales and several important ethic lessons that affect us till the end of our lives.

Secondly, at school we study bigger things about sciences and languages, but after school we learn from our parents. In my opinion, we spend most of our time at home with our families than it at school. I think when we leave school, maybe we will forget parts of the lessons we learn at school if we do not experience them in life, but I strongly believe we will never forget what our parents have taught us because we use it every day. For example, I believe I will never forget what my parents told me about how to be grateful to other people who help me.

Thirdly, I totally believe parents love their sons or daughters unconditionally. Therefore, even when we grow older, get married and then have our own families with spouses and children, parents always keep watching us and help us to realize which is right and which is wrong in life. For instance, my older brother has got married and lived independently for two years but when he faces difficulties in his work or his life, he comes back to meet our parents and ask for advice.

To conclude, I strongly believe that parents are our best teachers.