MckenzieHarris
Sep 22, 2014
MckenzieHarris
Sep 22, 2014
Writing Feedback / Making an Impact- Parsons Artist statement 2014 [4]
Prompt:
ARTIST STATEMENT
What do you make, how do you make it, and why do you make? Ultimately, where do you visualize your creative abilities and academic study to take you after your education here at Parsons?
Making an Impact
Throughout my life I have never had a diary, just sketchbooks. Art has always been my way of expressing emotions in a way that I cannot through spoken or written words. Art is supposed to create emotion, whether its fascination, sorrow, disgust, etc. thats up to the artist. Its the same when it comes to fashion. When you get ready you put on something to show people something about yourself, you make a statement. I love designing fashion because it allows me to create wearable art pieces that represent whoever is wearing them and present an image to show to the world. Fashion makes everywhere become an art gallery, showing what each separate person wants to project among the world.
Since I was young I have had the biggest fear of leaving this world before I have time to make my mark. It has been a fear that has followed me my whole life and manifested in everything I do. The way to change the world is to be innovative. I believe if you live within limits then you will never be able to create something truly inspirational. Its important to use non traditional materials and think of crazy new things to try. Whenever I get the chance to try something new I take it, perhaps im crazy but thats better than being boring.
During my second summer at the Parsons Summer Intensive Studies we had a guest lecture from a recent parsons alumni. His name was Thi Wan and he talked about how for his senior project he spent months creating a new biodegradable fabric that would eventually fade away without harming the environment. This was completely eye opening because I had never thought of that because most of the time fashion is made out of fabric. This expanded the way I think and taught me to experiment with the way to create things.
I create art to show my emotions and inner feeling that cannot be spoken or written. Fashion is the ultimate form of self expression. When you create a piece it become transformed by whoever is wearing it. It means different things to different people which is what I absolutly love. Fashion allows me manipulate the human body. People have always told me that fashion cannot change the world and if you want to be truly successful become a lawyer or a doctor. Not many people can appreciate fashion because for many people fashion doesn't matter, but It allows me to project my feelings and innermost thoughts through designing and making a garment.
I am far from where I want to be but I am also far from where I started. Every single day is an investment for the future. I do at least one thing a day, no matter how small, that will help me to be successful. I have big ambitions and that I will never achieve if I do not work as hard as I possibly can. Studying at Parsons would help me grow immensely. During the past two summers at the summer intensive studies I was taught extremely valuable information, unlike anything i have learned before. Undoubtedly studying at parsons will take a lot of work but I am more than willing to put in the work in order to grow. Throughout my life, I never want to stop learning. Where ever I go I want to be able to have the freedom to express myself and utilize my creative abilities. I believe Parsons The New School For Design is the right choice for me because it allows me to have the freedom and the knowledge to create art that will impact the world.
Prompt:
ARTIST STATEMENT
What do you make, how do you make it, and why do you make? Ultimately, where do you visualize your creative abilities and academic study to take you after your education here at Parsons?
Making an Impact
Throughout my life I have never had a diary, just sketchbooks. Art has always been my way of expressing emotions in a way that I cannot through spoken or written words. Art is supposed to create emotion, whether its fascination, sorrow, disgust, etc. thats up to the artist. Its the same when it comes to fashion. When you get ready you put on something to show people something about yourself, you make a statement. I love designing fashion because it allows me to create wearable art pieces that represent whoever is wearing them and present an image to show to the world. Fashion makes everywhere become an art gallery, showing what each separate person wants to project among the world.
Since I was young I have had the biggest fear of leaving this world before I have time to make my mark. It has been a fear that has followed me my whole life and manifested in everything I do. The way to change the world is to be innovative. I believe if you live within limits then you will never be able to create something truly inspirational. Its important to use non traditional materials and think of crazy new things to try. Whenever I get the chance to try something new I take it, perhaps im crazy but thats better than being boring.
During my second summer at the Parsons Summer Intensive Studies we had a guest lecture from a recent parsons alumni. His name was Thi Wan and he talked about how for his senior project he spent months creating a new biodegradable fabric that would eventually fade away without harming the environment. This was completely eye opening because I had never thought of that because most of the time fashion is made out of fabric. This expanded the way I think and taught me to experiment with the way to create things.
I create art to show my emotions and inner feeling that cannot be spoken or written. Fashion is the ultimate form of self expression. When you create a piece it become transformed by whoever is wearing it. It means different things to different people which is what I absolutly love. Fashion allows me manipulate the human body. People have always told me that fashion cannot change the world and if you want to be truly successful become a lawyer or a doctor. Not many people can appreciate fashion because for many people fashion doesn't matter, but It allows me to project my feelings and innermost thoughts through designing and making a garment.
I am far from where I want to be but I am also far from where I started. Every single day is an investment for the future. I do at least one thing a day, no matter how small, that will help me to be successful. I have big ambitions and that I will never achieve if I do not work as hard as I possibly can. Studying at Parsons would help me grow immensely. During the past two summers at the summer intensive studies I was taught extremely valuable information, unlike anything i have learned before. Undoubtedly studying at parsons will take a lot of work but I am more than willing to put in the work in order to grow. Throughout my life, I never want to stop learning. Where ever I go I want to be able to have the freedom to express myself and utilize my creative abilities. I believe Parsons The New School For Design is the right choice for me because it allows me to have the freedom and the knowledge to create art that will impact the world.
MckenzieHarris
Sep 22, 2014
Writing Feedback / My Best Friend - I met her at "Young Pianist" Contest [5]
Instead you should say "I spent more time with Nadya than with anyone else."
You should just say that she loves playing with children instead of saying that she loves children and playing with them. You could say "Nadya loves to play with children"
Try combining two short sentences together to make a longer one! You could use "and" or even just a comma to do so.
But with Nadya I spent more time than anyone else
Instead you should say "I spent more time with Nadya than with anyone else."
Nadya loves children and to play with them.
You should just say that she loves playing with children instead of saying that she loves children and playing with them. You could say "Nadya loves to play with children"
Try combining two short sentences together to make a longer one! You could use "and" or even just a comma to do so.
MckenzieHarris
Sep 22, 2014
Writing Feedback / Almost every new invention is somehow connected with the previous achievements in that field; GRE [4]
Avoid using "First of all", "To sum up" and phrases like those. Try just cutting them out completely or finding something else as a substitute. Transition statements like those are often used in middle school writing and are unnecessary in your essay.
Also you should try to add more sentences to the first paragraph because there are only two right now and there should be at least four sentences in a paragraph.
Good evidence in your body paragraphs. Always explain after you give evidence.
Remember the typical paragraph format:
Topic sentence/claim
context
evidence/data
warrant
context
evidence/data
warrant
conclusion
Avoid using "First of all", "To sum up" and phrases like those. Try just cutting them out completely or finding something else as a substitute. Transition statements like those are often used in middle school writing and are unnecessary in your essay.
Also you should try to add more sentences to the first paragraph because there are only two right now and there should be at least four sentences in a paragraph.
Good evidence in your body paragraphs. Always explain after you give evidence.
Remember the typical paragraph format:
Topic sentence/claim
context
evidence/data
warrant
context
evidence/data
warrant
conclusion
MckenzieHarris
Sep 12, 2014
Undergraduate / Superpowers. Pratt 2014 essay [2]
TOPIC Describe when and how you became interested in art, design, writing, architecture, or the particular major to which you are applying. Describe how this interest has manifested itself in your daily life. The essay should be 250-500 words.
When I was young I hated superheros. Spiderman, Batman, Superman, whatever. You name it I probably hated it. Whenever those cartoons came on I would immediately roll my eyes and hurry to change the channel. Being able to shoot spider webs from your hands, come on. Who would even want that anyway. Superheros were nothing but big fakes, even at that age I knew that a man in a cape saving the world was complete bs. Instead of looking up to burly men in obnoxious costumes, I looked up to people who had real powers. People who could make whatever they wanted with just their hands. Artists. Just like how my classmates were infatuated by the superheros on the tv screen, I was captivated by my mother's superpower. Whenever she was painting I was there by her side, passing her new colors, paintbrushes and even trying to mimic what she was painting with my crayola watercolor set. Just like my mother, my grandmother was another one of my "super heros". Everything she created was viewed as a masterpiece in my eyes. They always encourage me and were my number one fans. I knew that one day I wanted to be just like them.
Along with my childhood, one of my superheros slowly faded away. My first wave of reality hit me and hit me hard. I was not a child anymore and I had no clue what I was supposed to do. I couldn't let my heros down. My life was consumed by phony friends, hateful people and boys who didn't notice me. That was my whole world. To me there was nothing beyond that. Waking up each day was immense undertaking. I was at war. Should I fight this? or do I just let the darkness win? no I shouldn't. Do I take the easy way out? would anyone notice? Those questions went through my head every waking second of everyday. The worst part about it is that I was drowning and no one seemed to notice or if they did they didn't care enough to send me a raft. After coming close to the end many times I decided that if no one else was going to fight for me I had to. I was desperate for someone to save me but I realized I was the only one who could. So I taught myself how to swim.
That month decided to take a huge risk and sign up for the summer intensive studies at Parsons The New School for Design. Ive always had an eye for fashion and decided that I should give it a try. With something to look forward to I became a lot more optimistic about life. When I arrived in NYC aka the city of my dreams all I had was determination and a suitcase full of brand new art supplies(and maybe a couple others filled with clothes). It was the most rewarding month of my life. For the first time in my life I fell in love. With fashion design. I was able to express myself in a way that I never could before. I finally found something that I love and wouldn't mind spending my whole life doing. I knew that this is what I wanted to do. This is my superpower.
Everyday I wake up and think about how I can improve. I am far from where I want to be but I am also far from where I started. I am a firm believer that every single day is an investment for the future. I do at least one thing a day, no matter how small, that will help me to get to where I want to be. I have big ambitions and I know that I will never achieve them if I do not work as hard as I possibly can. Being able to create fashion is one thing that keeps me going no matter what other stuff is going on around me. Everything I have overcome just gives me more motivation to work harder and harder. My old feelings of hopelessness comes back every once and a while but I know that I can get over anything if I just believe in myself as much as my superheros believed in me.
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TOPIC Describe when and how you became interested in art, design, writing, architecture, or the particular major to which you are applying. Describe how this interest has manifested itself in your daily life. The essay should be 250-500 words.
When I was young I hated superheros. Spiderman, Batman, Superman, whatever. You name it I probably hated it. Whenever those cartoons came on I would immediately roll my eyes and hurry to change the channel. Being able to shoot spider webs from your hands, come on. Who would even want that anyway. Superheros were nothing but big fakes, even at that age I knew that a man in a cape saving the world was complete bs. Instead of looking up to burly men in obnoxious costumes, I looked up to people who had real powers. People who could make whatever they wanted with just their hands. Artists. Just like how my classmates were infatuated by the superheros on the tv screen, I was captivated by my mother's superpower. Whenever she was painting I was there by her side, passing her new colors, paintbrushes and even trying to mimic what she was painting with my crayola watercolor set. Just like my mother, my grandmother was another one of my "super heros". Everything she created was viewed as a masterpiece in my eyes. They always encourage me and were my number one fans. I knew that one day I wanted to be just like them.
Along with my childhood, one of my superheros slowly faded away. My first wave of reality hit me and hit me hard. I was not a child anymore and I had no clue what I was supposed to do. I couldn't let my heros down. My life was consumed by phony friends, hateful people and boys who didn't notice me. That was my whole world. To me there was nothing beyond that. Waking up each day was immense undertaking. I was at war. Should I fight this? or do I just let the darkness win? no I shouldn't. Do I take the easy way out? would anyone notice? Those questions went through my head every waking second of everyday. The worst part about it is that I was drowning and no one seemed to notice or if they did they didn't care enough to send me a raft. After coming close to the end many times I decided that if no one else was going to fight for me I had to. I was desperate for someone to save me but I realized I was the only one who could. So I taught myself how to swim.
That month decided to take a huge risk and sign up for the summer intensive studies at Parsons The New School for Design. Ive always had an eye for fashion and decided that I should give it a try. With something to look forward to I became a lot more optimistic about life. When I arrived in NYC aka the city of my dreams all I had was determination and a suitcase full of brand new art supplies(and maybe a couple others filled with clothes). It was the most rewarding month of my life. For the first time in my life I fell in love. With fashion design. I was able to express myself in a way that I never could before. I finally found something that I love and wouldn't mind spending my whole life doing. I knew that this is what I wanted to do. This is my superpower.
Everyday I wake up and think about how I can improve. I am far from where I want to be but I am also far from where I started. I am a firm believer that every single day is an investment for the future. I do at least one thing a day, no matter how small, that will help me to get to where I want to be. I have big ambitions and I know that I will never achieve them if I do not work as hard as I possibly can. Being able to create fashion is one thing that keeps me going no matter what other stuff is going on around me. Everything I have overcome just gives me more motivation to work harder and harder. My old feelings of hopelessness comes back every once and a while but I know that I can get over anything if I just believe in myself as much as my superheros believed in me.
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