Mizz_thinkable
Dec 24, 2014
Mizz_thinkable
Dec 24, 2014
Undergraduate / "I can now run a mile in 5 minutes in 30 seconds." - COMMON APP [2]
Hi there this is a good essay I also wrote on of my recent college essays on track so I think your story line is great its just your wording is a little off.
My feet pound against the pavement.( My feet is pounding against the pavement with every step I take, as the pain in my legs grows worse and I try to breathe,but no amount of air can satisfy me.) With each step I take, the pain in my legs grows worse. I try to breathe, but no amount of air can satisfy me. The alarm on my phone goes off, and I stop moving. My lungs begin to fill with air, and my legs go numb. Starring at my phone, I try to articulate its meaning out loud. " 5 minutes and 30 seconds. I can now run a mile in 5 minutes in 30 seconds." I sit down before my next exercise. I am in pain. I am tired.I am happy.
Hi there this is a good essay I also wrote on of my recent college essays on track so I think your story line is great its just your wording is a little off.
My feet pound against the pavement.( My feet is pounding against the pavement with every step I take, as the pain in my legs grows worse and I try to breathe,but no amount of air can satisfy me.) With each step I take, the pain in my legs grows worse. I try to breathe, but no amount of air can satisfy me. The alarm on my phone goes off, and I stop moving. My lungs begin to fill with air, and my legs go numb. Starring at my phone, I try to articulate its meaning out loud. " 5 minutes and 30 seconds. I can now run a mile in 5 minutes in 30 seconds." I sit down before my next exercise. I am in pain. I am tired.I am happy.
Mizz_thinkable
Dec 24, 2014
Undergraduate / UVA ESSAY BIGGIE SMALLZ READY TO DIE [5]
Thanks for the advice and that kendrick lamar song was a really great song.
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Thanks for the advice and that kendrick lamar song was a really great song.
Mizz_thinkable
Dec 23, 2014
Undergraduate / UVA ESSAY BIGGIE SMALLZ READY TO DIE [5]
Thanks for the tips and I understand I am alittle all over the place.
Thanks for the tips and I understand I am alittle all over the place.
Mizz_thinkable
Dec 20, 2014
Undergraduate / UVA ESSAY BIGGIE SMALLZ READY TO DIE [5]
What music, art, science, mathematics or literature has challenged, surprised, or unsettled you and in what way.
Ready to Die is a very thought provoking song created by the notorious B.I.G (biggie smallz), for why would anyone say that they are ready to die. However the more I thought about it I realized that this song relates to my life. It challenged my thinking in more ways than one, for why would anyone want to speak their own death into the atmosphere. The answer to my question was right in front of me. The more I thought about it, the more I realized that this song relates to my life. In this song it talks about how he was ready to kill himself over all the horrible obstacles, and malicious things he had done in his life. However, at the age of twelve, when I was living with my abusive parents I pondered the same thoughts. The negative things that befell me made me want to seek out thoughts of suicide. Fortunately, my new parents taught me to never speak anything negative into the atmosphere. When I learned how Biggie Smalls died, I pushed all those thoughts of suicide out of my head and became a more positive person. I became determined to not let my situation get the best of me. I learned to survive my difficult hardships Moreover, instead of being ready to die, I am ready to achieve my dreams of attending the University of Virginia, because I am ready to live.
What music, art, science, mathematics or literature has challenged, surprised, or unsettled you and in what way.
Ready to Die is a very thought provoking song created by the notorious B.I.G (biggie smallz), for why would anyone say that they are ready to die. However the more I thought about it I realized that this song relates to my life. It challenged my thinking in more ways than one, for why would anyone want to speak their own death into the atmosphere. The answer to my question was right in front of me. The more I thought about it, the more I realized that this song relates to my life. In this song it talks about how he was ready to kill himself over all the horrible obstacles, and malicious things he had done in his life. However, at the age of twelve, when I was living with my abusive parents I pondered the same thoughts. The negative things that befell me made me want to seek out thoughts of suicide. Fortunately, my new parents taught me to never speak anything negative into the atmosphere. When I learned how Biggie Smalls died, I pushed all those thoughts of suicide out of my head and became a more positive person. I became determined to not let my situation get the best of me. I learned to survive my difficult hardships Moreover, instead of being ready to die, I am ready to achieve my dreams of attending the University of Virginia, because I am ready to live.
