Writing Feedback / In developed countries like America, France and Germany nearly everyone seems to own a car. [3]

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Topic: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In twenty years there will be fewer cars in use than there are today.

In developed countries like America, France and Germany nearly everyone seems to own a car. Private cars are obviously necessary to go to work, to do the weekly shopping and to stay in touch with friends. But we are living in a changing world and I believe that there will be fewer cars in use in twenty years than there are today. My opinion is supported by natural, social and even infrastructural arguments.

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