Posts by tiawulansari

tiawulansari

Mar 15, 2015

Writing Feedback / Australian boys and girls of age 5-14 leisure activities [4]

-gauravwalia1988
Thank you for the feedback. Mostly i still used simple words and sentences in my writing, will try for the better one for the next

-Niddumakhi
Thank you, noted
I'll try again for sure and here i attached the graph

Writing_Task_1_Leis.jpg

tiawulansari

Mar 15, 2015

Writing Feedback / Australian boys and girls of age 5-14 leisure activities [4]

Hello, kindly to check my writing
Thank you in advance
-Tia-

The graph illustrates the preferred leisure activities of boys and girls age 5-14 in Australia and is measured in percentage. Overall, it is immediately apparent that watching television or videos is the most favorite activity of Australian children.

With regard to watching television or videos, 100% of boys and girls in Australia do this kind of activity in leisure time and become the most activity done by children.

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