zeref
Apr 7, 2015
Writing Feedback / Ielts: mix of both - competition and cooperation should be taught to the student [3]
Thanks for correcting my flaws. I will work on them
Thanks for correcting my flaws. I will work on them
zeref
Apr 7, 2015
Writing Feedback / Ielts: mix of both - competition and cooperation should be taught to the student [3]
Topic: Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taugh to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
And Please can any one tell me what type of score will i get for this essay.
Some people argue that children should be motivated to join competition, while other conclude that sense of cooperation is needed among children to make them better adults. However in my opinion, i believe that mix of both sense of competition and cooperation is needed to make children better adults.
There are many advantages of competition. Firstly, the sense competition among children will strive them to work hard and get first position in class. The students competing against each other, will try hard to improve themselves in order to perform well against their rival students. Each student will try his/her out most to achieve better position in class. We live in a very competitive society, so students should be prepared for it. When i was student, my school lacked sense of competition, students only cared about passing the exams. As a result our school ranked lower. So competition among students is also important.
There are also disadvantage of competition. As students will become selfish. Many parents would also compel their children to achieve better marks, so they can feel superior in family.
On the other hand there are many people who believe that cooperation has better influence on children than competing among them. Team work solves problem faster and better. Children studying together can help each other understand better, and can solve their home work much quicker. Each can help other in covering their weakness. In groups students can learn a lot of skills from each other. It also become easier for them to interact with other individual in the society. However different occasion need different skills, for example during exam, helping each other mean cheating.
So in general, mix of both competition and cooperation should be taught to the student
Topic: Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taugh to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
And Please can any one tell me what type of score will i get for this essay.
Some people argue that children should be motivated to join competition, while other conclude that sense of cooperation is needed among children to make them better adults. However in my opinion, i believe that mix of both sense of competition and cooperation is needed to make children better adults.
There are many advantages of competition. Firstly, the sense competition among children will strive them to work hard and get first position in class. The students competing against each other, will try hard to improve themselves in order to perform well against their rival students. Each student will try his/her out most to achieve better position in class. We live in a very competitive society, so students should be prepared for it. When i was student, my school lacked sense of competition, students only cared about passing the exams. As a result our school ranked lower. So competition among students is also important.
There are also disadvantage of competition. As students will become selfish. Many parents would also compel their children to achieve better marks, so they can feel superior in family.
On the other hand there are many people who believe that cooperation has better influence on children than competing among them. Team work solves problem faster and better. Children studying together can help each other understand better, and can solve their home work much quicker. Each can help other in covering their weakness. In groups students can learn a lot of skills from each other. It also become easier for them to interact with other individual in the society. However different occasion need different skills, for example during exam, helping each other mean cheating.
So in general, mix of both competition and cooperation should be taught to the student
