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GRE Essay: "Sports stars and movie stars have an obligation to behave as role models for the young people who look up to them. In return for the millions of dollars that they are paid, we should expect then to fulfill this societal responsibilities."

I completely agree with the speaker's view the fabled people in our country to whom lot of youth's look up to them, In return these renowned people should also contribute to the social causes in our country. Stars come up with the unique ability to influence the younger generation, this can motivate the younger crowd to think good and do good. This would a small step from them to inspire the younger generation and contribute for the welfare of the society.

Movie starts and sports stars are those whom the younger crowd usually admire and aspire to be one in future. Not just with the young masses but also amongst the adults they usually tend to live their dream in those lives of celebrities. Youth venerate them so much that they follow celebrities work so meticulously and also try to imitate their icons in every manner they act and behave. The life of the celebrities is always under scrutiny. If these renowned people take a step to bring a change in the society, it would be huge motivation factor not just for the amateur crowd but even the country would look up to them with reverence.

I have noticed a lot of celebrities in past years have played a major role in contributing for the social causes, Examples Hollywood stars like anjalena Jolie and Brad Pitt have taken initiative to promote and protect various humanitarian causes. They have been associated with lot of charitable organization in various parts of the country. They have their own organization named Jolie-Pitt foundation which is mainly concerned with eradicating extreme poverty, conserve wildlife, protecting natural resources. This steps of the celebrities might also encourage the opulent crowd in our society to take a step and contribute to the betterment of the society.

There are few famous celebrities have created campaign against cancer awareness also set up their own charitable organization to cure and fight against it. Famous Indian international cricketer Yuvraj Singh who is also a survivor of cancer have taken an initiative and founded YouWeCan a cancer charity, to detect cancer at an early stage and support to fight against it. Sportsman Lance Armstring, famous US cyclist who is also a survivor of terrestrial cancer have also founded cancer charity LiveStrong to treat the sick people. Few celebrities have established AIDS foundation to try to stem the destruction the disease (HIV/AIDS) causing around the world.

In India, there has been a rising percentage of crime against women such Rape, child abuse, domestic violence mainly due to male chauvinism. Several organization and campaign are conducted to fight against these violence in our society. Few Bollywood celebrities have started an initiate with MARD (men against Rape and discrimination) to create awareness amongst men to instill gender equality and respect for women. Few celebrities have taken part in transgender equality in our society. Smoking has been a growing trends especially amongst the youth, this practice not only kills one's life but also the people around you. I feel even movies should be exculpated with such contents which portrays violence against women and smoking. These at times can be taken as heroism amongst the youth and might set a bad example.

However I feel not all celebrities should be obliged to take part in social cause, because it is their personal choice to contribute to the society, they should never be imposed as a burden.

Celebrities have always entertained us and I feel public has played a major role for this success in their lives. In return it is their responsibility to inspire and motivate the mass of all ages for better living. In the end I want to sum up stating I think it's the duty of every citizen to take part in every small step of social cause to make a big change for the betterment of the country.