Undergraduate / NYU Tisch School of the Arts - Review "How We Define Creative Entrepreneur" [4]

Review "How We Define Creative Entrepreneur"above
(tisch.nyu.edu/clive-davis-institute/application-requirements/institute-notes-on-entrepreneurship).
In your Statement of Intent, clearly identify which of these seven entrepreneur types you hope to become as you progress in your career. Based on your experiences so far, what kinds of skills do you possess - or do you hope to develop - that will allow you to succeed as your chosen type of entrepreneur?

2 pages, double-spaced, .pdf format"

Below is my first paragraph, and this is the first time I'm writing one of these types of essays. How is it? Any constructive criticism will be much appreciated:

Throughout my career, I hope to become a producer, performer, and executive entrepreneur. Being an artist nowadays require being intricate and multi-layered. In the past, most people in the music industry were entitled to one specific task, whether it would be songwriting, performing, or the many other professions in the field. At this point in time, we can evidently see that the industry evolved from that procedure. Artists today take more responsibilities by creating their own labels, writing their own lyrics, and producing their own songs. Cultural giants like Kanye West and Drake are dominant figures of this contemporary artistry. Considering this, I am convinced that being a multi-layered artist is necessary in pursuance of commercial success, and I intend to do just that.