Jetninja
Oct 15, 2015
Undergraduate / My Dinosaur Bone Essay for Caltech - I don't think I am expressing myself well enough (help!) [3]
This is my supplemental essay for Caltech. Currently 180 words.
In an increasingly global and interdependent society, there is a need for diversity in thought, background, and experience in science, technology, engineering and mathematics. How do you see yourself contributing to the diversity of Caltech's community? (200 word max)
When I was 11 years old I loved making networks of sand tunnels in the playground. One day, as I connected my tunnels together, I found the most amazing artifact: a bone. But let's be real here, this couldn't have been a chicken bone from the KFC across the street, it had to be a dinosaur bone.
I was telling all of my friends how I had discovered a Velociraptor bone. The thought that it could have been a chicken bone...was just uninteresting! Practicality has its place, but as we zoom closer and closer into, say, this computer screen, practicality breaks down. My friends looked at the small, old, corroded bone and concluded it came from a chicken, but I was the one who said it was something else.
The most interesting concepts of our reality are the ones that still cannot be fully explained; I want to bring this "interest" to Caltech. Let's face it, the bone was probably just a chicken bone, but the world needs people to think outside the overused box. That's where I come in.
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I had some more ideas to include for this essay topic that I benched, I'll include them here:
-How far I will go to prove my point
-Maybe try to find a way to compare the bone to my life right now
-A separate idea altogether, talk about how I do my homework with at the table alongside my brother, my mom, and my dad, who all do their homework as well with me. Maybe talk about how I help them and teach them grammar because they still have trouble writing in English since they are in college classes right now. I talked about my minority background in my common app essay though so I didn't want to be redundant
-Adding in the idea that Earth is too "mainstream" for me. Not as interesting as the rest of the Universe.
Thanks and any ideas are appreciated!!
This is my supplemental essay for Caltech. Currently 180 words.
In an increasingly global and interdependent society, there is a need for diversity in thought, background, and experience in science, technology, engineering and mathematics. How do you see yourself contributing to the diversity of Caltech's community? (200 word max)
When I was 11 years old I loved making networks of sand tunnels in the playground. One day, as I connected my tunnels together, I found the most amazing artifact: a bone. But let's be real here, this couldn't have been a chicken bone from the KFC across the street, it had to be a dinosaur bone.
I was telling all of my friends how I had discovered a Velociraptor bone. The thought that it could have been a chicken bone...was just uninteresting! Practicality has its place, but as we zoom closer and closer into, say, this computer screen, practicality breaks down. My friends looked at the small, old, corroded bone and concluded it came from a chicken, but I was the one who said it was something else.
The most interesting concepts of our reality are the ones that still cannot be fully explained; I want to bring this "interest" to Caltech. Let's face it, the bone was probably just a chicken bone, but the world needs people to think outside the overused box. That's where I come in.
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I had some more ideas to include for this essay topic that I benched, I'll include them here:
-How far I will go to prove my point
-Maybe try to find a way to compare the bone to my life right now
-A separate idea altogether, talk about how I do my homework with at the table alongside my brother, my mom, and my dad, who all do their homework as well with me. Maybe talk about how I help them and teach them grammar because they still have trouble writing in English since they are in college classes right now. I talked about my minority background in my common app essay though so I didn't want to be redundant
-Adding in the idea that Earth is too "mainstream" for me. Not as interesting as the rest of the Universe.
Thanks and any ideas are appreciated!!