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Name: Joseph Park
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jpark97   
Feb 28, 2016
Undergraduate / Transfer from UH to UTAustin; Statement of purpose; Comp. Sci. Major [4]

Oh sorry I was in such a hurry to get this out, I forgot to post the prompt.

Also, Natural Sciences requires a Topic A essay that describes how your intended major would impact achievement of your educational and career goals.

So do you think I should entirely replace my introduction with something along the lines of the sentence you provided?

Thanks so much for the advice and will reply tonight/tomorrow with my revised essay. Once again, thank you!
jpark97   
Feb 28, 2016
Undergraduate / Transfer from UH to UTAustin; Statement of purpose; Comp. Sci. Major [4]

I was pretty iffy on the prompt and I'm sure there's still a lot to improve, so all criticism is greatly appreciated and welcome!

I don't think that anyone would describe having no friends as healthy or fun, and that's because it's really not. For a while, in my 8th and 9th grade, that was me. I was that kid that had no friends. I had just recently moved to Houston and school and being an introvert, it wasn't easy making friends. For a short period of time, I had a few friends, but I ended up driving them away with my rude, immature, and arrogant personality. Although it was my fault, I didn't realize it at the time, and having no friends caused me some grief. However, if this hadn't happened, I might not have been who I am today and majoring in a field that I love.

To cope with the absence of friends, I devoted most of my time after school to online video games. It helped relieve the stress from school and I actually made some online friends. They were great guys and soon we all started talking on Skype while playing our games. We introduced new games to each other and after spending so much time on these things, I thought, "How cool would it be if I could make my own game?" Of course I didn't actually create a game right then and there, but it got me interested in computer programming. I downloaded a coding program, looked up video tutorials on YouTube, signed up for computer science classes at my school, and did anything else I could think of. Soon after, my friends showed me this game called "Minecraft." This is what really got me hooked on coding because it allowed me to use code to modify the game to do what I wanted. The first time I created a "mod" and saw it work correctly gave me a boost of motivation and I started to look at the world in a different way. I saw how immensely computer science was integrated into our modern technology and thought of just how much more it was capable of. My hope is that one day I can create something that can help other people in a similar way games have helped me.

The University of Texas at Austin would be an incredible opportunity for me. The university and its city has amazing people to create and share amazing experiences with. Plus, the department of Computer Science, being one of the best in the nation, would provide the education I need to program something that will have an impact on society. I believe that I can be a good addition to the school, applying my love and passion for computer science to everything project I do.
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