Letters / Undergraduate motivation letter to state my interest to apply for Bachelor in industrial engineering [8]

With this letter I hereby wish to state my interest and ebullient to apply for Bachelor program in industrial engineering. I have developed this strong passion towards this program since I was kid, dreaming to make Indonesia, or even the world to the better place

Quoting over one of the greatest scientist Neil deGrasse Tyson said that "Ever since the Industrial Revolution, investments in science and technology have proved to be reliable engines of economic growth" which I believe industrial engineering is holding the important key for economical flow in Indonesia. Our industrial growth and movement in the world right now is what evoke me more to be interested being part of this program, by me joining this program, could make me one step further to reach my dream. Surrounded by amazing people and great university, make me believe that this dream is going to be accomplished in a flash

Joint influence of my artistic skills, knowledge and my ability to communicate in English which I believe helped me to be more closer to the world. As one of the main professional achievements I would like to point out my involvement in the Southern-Sumatra debate competition, that I get the second place, the first winner of debate competition in my city, second place for LCT Bahasa Indonesia, that make me not only good at English but also my native tongue Bahasa Indonesia, strengthen my ability to be a good communicator

I feel that I have not satisfied my urge to learn, especially when there is so much still to learn. I have strong desire to push a head, and I plan to invest a lot in my education to build my career. I now require a program that can provide me with the best resources, and educational tools available. Indonesia University can rightly provide me those and I hope that I will be given an opportunity to not only study at Indonesia University, but also to become fully absorbed in the planning community.

Since the research focus and facilities available in Indonesia University, complement my interests and requirements, I believe that being a student in it would not only empower my career development, but would give me the framework my utilize my full potentials. I realize the highly competitive demands of the program, but I have the ability, ambition and motivation to exceed the requirements and to excel. I am eager to gain new experiences, and, in my opinion, this program is the best way to achieve that. Therefore, I would be very proud and happy if I received the admission for this program.

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