yoyolot
Apr 21, 2016
Writing Feedback / IELTS - land degradation problem. Some causes which negatively affect the fertility of lands [5]
Hi Mochtar,
Thank you for your suggestion. I also found some words were repeated after reading it again.
The reason why I separated the first and second paragraph is from a teacher's suggestion. He recommanded to paraphrase the main idea of the question in the first paragraph and give a brief summary of the main information of charts in the second.
Hi Mochtar,
Thank you for your suggestion. I also found some words were repeated after reading it again.
The reason why I separated the first and second paragraph is from a teacher's suggestion. He recommanded to paraphrase the main idea of the question in the first paragraph and give a brief summary of the main information of charts in the second.