Research Papers / Is Vegetarianism a healthy diet? It's important to know the true health benefits as well as the risk [3]

As the number of vegetarians in the world climbs higher
they should only do so if they are fully aware

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Becoming knowledgeable about this diet before becoming a vegetarian is the first step to success when becoming a vegetarian. (sentence sounds bad)

In order to get basics out of the way it is important to explain what this diet even consists of. (sentence should not end in of)

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when explaining different types of vegetarians, explain more about why there are different types and what these different types will eat

There are even more kinds of vegetarians, ranging with all different types of 'rules' to their diet. (move this sentence to a different spot)

The most basic reasoning for vegetarianism (change wording)
There is a whole list of diseases and illnesses that vegetarianism can help prevent: high cholesterol, diabetes, stroke, osteoporosis, arthritis, allergies, asthma(...) (is this whole list necessary?) instead of talking about all the things that it COULD help maybe talk more about what the diet will for sure help

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This essay has interesting information but it seems a little short. Going more into depth on what the benefits of this diet do could help understand better. Also, it is confusing at times to understand whether or not this really is a healthy diet or not so explain further on why you come to the conclusion that it is one.