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Statement of purpose for an internship research program in mechanical engineering [5]
Guys.. i need your help to correct this statement of purpose.. i'm applying to an internship research program..
is this SOP strong enough?
a million thanks beforehand :)
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I would like to express my interest in the Internship Research Program in xxx.
I earned my BEng from xxx in xxx. This course of study gave me a strong foundation in understanding, designing, and developing sensors comprehensively.
I was fortunate to study in a program that was forward-thinking, with lecturers who always pushed me to look to the future. In this environment, I was also surrounded by highly motivated and visionary students, who challenged me to push myself to the best of my ability. The classes I took gave me an understanding of various sensors, ranging from everyday use to biochemical hazard protection sensor. I also took a course of nanotechnology in which I gained comprehension about nanoparticles and nanotubes.
My thesis was about 'Safety Integrity Level Evaluation of Fire and Gas System', in which I quantitatively calculated the reliability of the safety system against fire and gas leak hazard. In this research, my purpose was to determine the ideal proof test interval. A proof test insures the related instrumentation or equipment is functioning as expected. The interval between proof tests should not be too short, as it is cost-inefficient, while also should not be too long, as it is dangerous. In order to calculate the reliability I had to understand how the sensor works. I also had to understand the components of the sensor itself, as the sensor may fail to work if the electrical components-in this case surge arrester and current splitter-fail.
After graduating, I worked as an instrument engineer in xxx, a global energy contractor company. My role was selecting, installing, and managing sensors used for measurement and safety in oil, gas, and mining facilities so that these systems and processes operate effectively, efficiently and safely. I gained better understanding of sensors this way as I have to consider which sensing method is the most effective in a certain condition. I also had to consider other factors such as the durability, accuracy, and economic value. For instance, when I had to choose which level sensor is best used in a LPG storage tank, I chose non-contacting radar level sensor. The challenge lies in the very low dielectric constant of the fluid, causing impractical use of differential pressure level sensor. Non-contacting radar can be mounted outside of the tank, and therefore is more durable due to possess no interface with the fluid.
The knowledge, abilities, and experiences about instruments which I have are directly applicable to the skills needed for designing ultra-sensitive sensors. It would be an amazing opportunity for my future career, and an opportunity to make a contribution to the world. This chance could help me further understand the field I want to study and provide me with insights that will prepare me for my master's degree. I would also gain more insights in the research world and how it works.
As I considered my options for research, xxx stood out for a number of reasons. The interdisciplinary nature of the program will give me a much broader, more practical understanding of all aspects of the sensing instruments. Having collaborated extensively with engineers during my work, I believe in the importance of thinking beyond narrow academic disciplines. With the inherently international nature of today's energy industry, it is important for me to conduct the research in xxx in order to gain ideas on studying a master's degree in an international, multi-cultural environment. I am also drawn to the government's commitment to science and knowledge, and with my participation I hope I can contribute to the success of the country while pursuing my professional goals.
I am very excited to join the incoming research internship in xxx. I sincerely believe I would be an excellent student in your program, and I am prepared to work and study hard in order to meet the high standards that xxx is known for.
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italic: i would like to vomit that sentence.. what do you think?
any comment would be appreciated, thanks !