Ximon
Aug 6, 2016
Writing Feedback / Write a report for a university lecturer about the information on popularity of two new music sites [2]
Hi everyone on the Essay forum =)
I am currently working on receiving band 6 on my IELTS exam on the 13th of August, which was in next Saturday
This is my second attempt on IETLS exam, I have receive band 5.5 on the 16th of July, and what I need is extra 0.5
Hope everyone can give me advice and checking my essay for me !
Thank you =)
Title: The graph below compares the number of visits to two new music sites on the web.
Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
The following diagram illustrates the comparison of visitors in 2 new forming musical website on the internet during the fifteen days period of time.
The site "Pop Parade" receive approximately 120000 visitors on the first day, and remain steady on the number of visit in the 2nd and 3rd day.It start decreased after the 3rd day and by the 5th day it dropped to 60000 which was the half number of the visitors in the first day, and it reached the valleys on the 7th day. On the 9th day, the number of visit increased dramatically, it reached 150000 visitors in 11th day and went down again after that. In the 15th day, it reach peak of the number of visit on 170000 visitors.
For the site "Music Choice" receive 40000 visitors in the first day, but it showed decreased on the 2nd and 3rd day, since the 4th day it have remain plateau till the 11th day. It went up dramatically after the 11th day and reached 120000 visitors on the 12th day, but it end up with the 70000 visitors on the 15th day.Overall, the site "Pop Parade" have more popularity than the site "Music Choice".
Hi everyone on the Essay forum =)
I am currently working on receiving band 6 on my IELTS exam on the 13th of August, which was in next Saturday
This is my second attempt on IETLS exam, I have receive band 5.5 on the 16th of July, and what I need is extra 0.5
Hope everyone can give me advice and checking my essay for me !
Thank you =)
Title: The graph below compares the number of visits to two new music sites on the web.
Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
The following diagram illustrates the comparison of visitors in 2 new forming musical website on the internet during the fifteen days period of time.
The site "Pop Parade" receive approximately 120000 visitors on the first day, and remain steady on the number of visit in the 2nd and 3rd day.It start decreased after the 3rd day and by the 5th day it dropped to 60000 which was the half number of the visitors in the first day, and it reached the valleys on the 7th day. On the 9th day, the number of visit increased dramatically, it reached 150000 visitors in 11th day and went down again after that. In the 15th day, it reach peak of the number of visit on 170000 visitors.
For the site "Music Choice" receive 40000 visitors in the first day, but it showed decreased on the 2nd and 3rd day, since the 4th day it have remain plateau till the 11th day. It went up dramatically after the 11th day and reached 120000 visitors on the 12th day, but it end up with the 70000 visitors on the 15th day.Overall, the site "Pop Parade" have more popularity than the site "Music Choice".
