Kusumaningtyas
Aug 10, 2016
Writing Feedback / I need comments for my IELTS Task 1 about Burnaby Public Library (my first writing) [4]
The line graph reveals the number of books read by men and women in Burnaby Public Library from 2011 to 2014. Overall, it can be seen that 2011 to 2014 witnessed a rise in the levels of books read by men compared to women.
To begin, in 2011, women read more books than men. It was leveled at 5000 books which was higher than men read, 3000 books. Next, over the following year, the rate from women increased markedly to 8000 books while the number from men saw a gradual growth to 4000 books. Surprisingly, both levels of books read by men and women rose during the period 2012 to 2013 and they hit a similar point of 10000 books. However, there was a noticeable fall to 8000 books which were read by women in 2014. In contrast, the number of books read by men inclined dramatically when the level hit a peak of 14000 books at the end of the year.
The line graph reveals the number of books read by men and women in Burnaby Public Library from 2011 to 2014. Overall, it can be seen that 2011 to 2014 witnessed a rise in the levels of books read by men compared to women.
To begin, in 2011, women read more books than men. It was leveled at 5000 books which was higher than men read, 3000 books. Next, over the following year, the rate from women increased markedly to 8000 books while the number from men saw a gradual growth to 4000 books. Surprisingly, both levels of books read by men and women rose during the period 2012 to 2013 and they hit a similar point of 10000 books. However, there was a noticeable fall to 8000 books which were read by women in 2014. In contrast, the number of books read by men inclined dramatically when the level hit a peak of 14000 books at the end of the year.
