Writing Feedback / Professional sport plays a huge role in the USA. Persuasive Finals Essay (Professional Athletes) [2]

Hi, I have a few suggestions for you:
-The introduction sounds a little repetitive (For two of these sports, drafting a high school athlete is a thing of the past) (Some sports have started to require that athletes attend college, but others allow them to turn pro after graduation). These carry the same meaning so try to take one away or blend them together for your point.

-The transitions between paragraphs are not very fluid. Try adding some better transition words to enhance the flow throughout the essay.

-Your conclusion is strong. It gets the point across of what you talked about the whole essay. Very good and precise.

Overall, I thought your essay is fairly strong. Doing some small clean-up to make the flow better and a stronger introduction will really help.

Good luck to you!