Hi, I need some more direction on writing a character analysis essay that describes the transformation of Montag's development. Over the course of Fahrenheit 451, you have observed how Montag is transformed from a willing participant in a fascist agenda into a revolutionary political agitator. Now you have the opportunity to write a character analysis illustrates this transformation. You will write a character analysis to share your analysis of Montag's development. I also forgot to mention that there is no paragraph requirement.
This is what I have so far,
Character Analysis of Montag in "Fahrenheit 451"
Within the classic 1953 dystopian novel "Fahrenheit 451" the American writer Ray Bradbury presents a futuristic imagined society in which people lead dehumanized lives where books are outlawed and firemen set fires to books in order for the totalitarian government to maintain suppression in the public eye. In this dystopian society presented, it is based on censorship of ideas and control of people's thoughts with entertainment. Throughout this novel, Bradbury warns against the desensitization of society during a time when people were undergoing social and cultural changes and the way modern technological conveniences of this age have consumed our lives and disconnected human beings. The novel's protagonist, Guy Montag, a third-generation fireman, is part of the government's effort to condemn knowledge through the destruction of books.Though Montag starts out as generally complacent and disillusioned with his role of censoring literature, he experiences a growing discontent with his society as he discovers the price of a book free world in attempt to challenge the legal system. Montag is a dynamic character that lives in a world of conformity who transforms due to key figures in his life whom influence him.
In the beginning of Montag's transformation, he begins to contemplate his own happiness, his career, and his relationship with his wife, after his interaction with his neighbor Clarisse. Her innocent curiosity and search for beauty in nature unlike anyone else in the community affects the way he sees the world through a different perspective. Clarrise's thoughts about nature capture the little attention everyone in their society including Montag pays to the natural world. "I sometimes think drivers don't know what grass is, or flowers, because they never see them slowly" (Bradbury). Because Clarisse opened his eyes, he saw how wrong the society was. He learns from his interactions with her how much more satisfying it is to have an actual human connection rather than consuming mindless entertainment.
In addition, Montag's moroseness reaches a critical point after he witnesses the burning of an old woman. It made Montag realize "There must be something in books, things we can't imagine to make a woman stay in a burning house, there must be something there. You don't stay for nothing." (Bradbury).
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The first part of the essay is well-done. The only issue I have is that you needed to incorporate more punctuation marks to indicate pauses. When your writing gets lengthy, you should be increasing as well your mindfulness for having pauses, considering that it can drastically affect the entirety of the writing.
There's also some inconsistencies with your usage of in-text citation. Assuming you are using MLA, the formatting of the parenthesis of the in-text should always be before the end punctuation of a line. Take a look at your second to the last paragraph and revise accordingly.
Practice on making your writing a lot more balanced. Being able to structure everything with an easier flow can certainly go a long way when you're writing.