Suicide "to be or not to be"; Garde 12 Hamlet Final Essay

Hey guys!
I have and essay due and i need your help as i suck at writing essay :(
I have to write an essay which demonstrates my ability to think critically about one particular aspect of Shakespeare's classic hamlet, and access and integrate the thinking of subject-area experts to verify my thesis.

My essay topic:
Suicide "to be or not to be"

My thesis is:
Hamlet considers death as an opportunity to end his pain, Hamlet seizes the problem, of whether to commit suicide or to live, as a question. "to be or not to be, that is the question"

In gender and queer studies Hamlet is shown as "weak" in the beginning of the novel than as "strong" when he chooses "not to be"

In gender and queer studies Hamlet is shown as "weak" in the beginning of the novelthan as "strong" when he chooses "not to be".

Novel - Hamlet is a PLAY not a novel
Than - Than is used when you say something like "The grass was greener on this side of the fence than the other side." Then is used when you have an order of things

In gender and queer studies Hamlet is shown as "weak" in the beginning of the play,then as "strong" when he chooses "not to be".

Other than that, it seems fine so far.
I don't really know how else to help you without knowing how you need help.

you should write about an essay which will explains about hamlets weakness.