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Do these sentences make sense? Can I change the wording?


hunnybun39 10 / 26  
Oct 24, 2008   #1
Fatigue affects a person's ability to perform self-care and limits his or her capacity to fulfill role responsibilities in the family.

Nurse should begin by assessing parent's perceptions of their family unit and marital problems; if each person's perceptions are understood, resolution is more likely.

By evaluating strengths, coping skills, and current support systems a family has, the nurse can identify techniques that have been previously successful.

The nurse should provide an atmosphere where the couple can express concerns, fears, and expectations, this promotes communication and support.

The nurse should phrase problems as "family" problems, this way they are dealt with by the family and reduces blaming. Assist family in setting realistic goals; this helps family's gain control over the situation (is there any way the wording can be changed of these sentences?)

EF_Team5 - / 1,586  
Oct 24, 2008   #2
Let's see:

1. Fine as it is.

2. Nurses ...fine from there out.

3. Fine.

4. Instead of a comma after "expectations" a semi colon would be more appropriate.

5. After "problems" end the sentence with a period. Make "this" the first word of the new sentence. It could be reworded as such: "This way they are dealt with by the family and blaming is reduced. The nurse should assist the family in setting realistic goals, as this helps the family gain control over the situation."

I hope this helps!

Regards,
Gloria
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