Undergraduate / 'Cell phone beep' - Stanford Intellectual Vitality [7]

Please help me out, i've been working on this for hours and this is all i've come up with.

Stanford students possess an intellectual vitality. Reflect on an idea or experience that has been important to your intellectual development. character limit 2000

'Beep Beep'. All faces turned grim as the only cell phone in the car died. The family road trip to Miami quickly became a nightmare as we were lost driving at midnight and now had lost all contact with help. The only form of hope, a car charger, was broken.

My eight-year-old self sensed the urgency and got to work. I pried open the charger using a pocketknife and laid everything out. A broken spring behind the metal contact caught my eye and I pondered the possible fixes. As I was thinking, my eyes suddenly landed on a stray pen. The light bulb in my head blazed to life. I knew the mechanism for a pen and I tore it apart to find a spring similar to the one in the charger. I switched out the parts, realigned the other parts, and clicked everything together. Praying that my fix would work, I anxiously jammed the charger into the socket with my eyes closed. When I didn't hear a sound, my heart started to sink. But then out of the silence, I heard a 'beep beep' and opened my eyes to see that the phone was turning on. A big smile was plastered on my face as my family cheered for me. Their worried expressions were transformed into happy ones and I felt like a hero.

At this moment, I realized how much I really loved to see how things worked. I had always liked to open up and fix things with my dad, but I did that more to make my dad happy than any other reason. I had never done it for my own enjoyment. This was the first time I realized that building and fixing things was fun. I got a rush out of it that I didn't get anywhere else. The fact that I can bring together parts that can't do anything alone into one contraption that serves a purpose amazes me still. I also love the fact that building something is pure creation. I am able to turn a concept that is in my mind into something in the real world. After this moment, I started building things for my own enjoyment. I was soon sure that I wanted to do it for the rest of my life and decided I wanted to be an engineer.

Any feedback is appreciated! I am not the best writer.