Writing Feedback / Similarities of Love and Jealousy in today's society - Dreaded Shakespear [42]

Ok, these are the ideas I have for the topic Jealousy overpowers love.

1. Roderigo's love was overpowered by Jealousy and it lead to his death.

2. Othello's love for Desdemona was overpowered by jealousy.

These are the two main ones I have which are not enough. I was thinking of saying that Iago's love for Othello was overpowered by Jealousy but I don't even know if Iago really has respect for Othello before he upgraded Cassio. Plus its not even really love.

Maybe I should focus on the topic Jealousy destroys everyone through hatred, revenge and mistrust?

Writing Feedback / Similarities of Love and Jealousy in today's society - Dreaded Shakespear [42]

EF_Simone

Wow I'm on the right track...that never happens. And yes he wanted to see all rough work.

But when Othello killed himself how was that jealousy overpowering love? I'm asking this because its a key element in the play and I have to have it in my essay.

Thanks

Writing Feedback / Similarities of Love and Jealousy in today's society - Dreaded Shakespear [42]

I'm so failing this essay ;(

DAMN YOU WILLIAM SHAKESPEARE AND YOU'RE ABILITY TO WRITE COMPLICATED MASTERPIECES THAT CONFUSE THE HELL OUT OF ME!

Writing Feedback / Similarities of Love and Jealousy in today's society - Dreaded Shakespear [42]

All this thinking has made me confused. Like I said writing essays is not my strong point epically on difficult topics like this.

I came up with two ideas for my 2 main body paragraphs and tried my best to relate them to topic Jealousy and love get confused. I'm not sure if I'm not the right track:

1. Othello's jealousy confused his love for Desdemona even though she was honest and when people are in love that's a main trait. I thought the same thing happened to Cassio.

2. The confusion of Othello's feelings of love and jealousy in the end made him commit suicide.

* I was going to change the topic to Jealously over powers love but I couldn't see how that played into Othello's tragedy.

Writing Feedback / Similarities of Love and Jealousy in today's society - Dreaded Shakespear [42]

Thank you very much. You're great intellect has made me go into a thinking frenzy. When I have my intro paragraph done I will post it.

Now the hard part is how to relate similarities of Love and Jealousy in today's society.

Writing Feedback / Similarities of Love and Jealousy in today's society - Dreaded Shakespear [42]


ok I'm very lost and confused. You're saying that jealousy and love mean the same thing? So could the topic be Jealousy vs love? I maybe could brain storm a thesis statement if that is the case.

Writing Feedback / Similarities of Love and Jealousy in today's society - Dreaded Shakespear [42]

EF_Sean

Yes thank you. Could sir please comment on what I was asking last post please? So I know I'm going on the right track this time!

Writing Feedback / Similarities of Love and Jealousy in today's society - Dreaded Shakespear [42]

EF_Sean

Hmm. well this is so sick. I just finished 90% of my essay. Thank you for telling me its crap. It is really appreciated that you take the time to help me.

I will pull an all-nighter to try and get it done on time.

I think I can salvage a bit of what I have from what I wrote. Yes I agree the topic "jealousy is an indicator of love." Now I must get about 10 quotes to prove this.

I just have one question, what could be in my 3-4 body paragraphs when talking about this topic? I guess I could write about Cassio and Desdemona. But I really would not know how to make 3-4 body paragraphs out of this topic.

I mean in my previous thesis I picked out love destroys everyone by anger violence and mistrust...but for this topic I guess the same could be applied?

Could the topic be jealousy is an indicator of love and revenge?

Thanks

Writing Feedback / Similarities of Love and Jealousy in today's society - Dreaded Shakespear [42]

Thanks Sean for the feedback. Well its a little late to change my entire thesis since I just can't spark up ideas in a jiffy, and I'm suppose to have a rough copy done and I don't think its going to be finished.

Also, if you look at things in a more general perspective you may find my thesis more clear. I'd think that Othello was destroyed by mistrust, due to the fact that Iago lied that his love life was being cheated. So if you look at it this way in a more general sense then does it become more clear?

Also Roderigo was destroyed by love too I think. Since Iago told him that he would eventually be with Desdemona. Iago used Roderigo's love for Desdemona to eventually kill him.

If my thesis still seems unclear maybe you could help me alter it a bit so that I can still use the ideas that I came up with?

Thanks

Writing Feedback / Similarities of Love and Jealousy in today's society - Dreaded Shakespear [42]

Thanks Sean!

It was captains orders to start the topic off generally and then talk about how its used in Othello. I need to work on my intro more but I think my topic sentence that I posted has improved to be more engaging. Like I said I no writer!

This is my first body paragraph: and I think it needs work

The character Othello is fueled by anger and starts to change when Iago speaks of Desdemona cheating on him. Once man and women are happily married, all seems well. If someone is suspected of cheating on their lover, it can drastically alter their state of mind. "Oh,now forever farewell the tranquil mind...Othello's occupation's gone."(Shakespeare 3,3 399-409) In this situation Othello starts to lose his dignity. He cannot handle mentally whats going on and starts to melt down. He even speaks of resigning from his job as general. In addition to love interfering with his career, it also makes him very angry. Iago's taunting of the handkerchief being in possession of Cassio further infuriates him. "If it be that, or any that was her, It speaks against her with the other proofs"(Shakespeare 3,3 500-501) This statement by Iago makes Othello think that Desdemona is having an affair with Cassio. Othello's anger can get so overwhelming that he fell into an epileptic seizure. Iago takes full advantage of this. "Nature would not...Handkerchief!-oh devil" (Shakespeare 4,1 48-53) The false affair enrages Othello so much that he falls into a epileptic seizure. His anger is starting to affect his health and well being. The entire affair has been caused by Iago's mistrust and his ability to attack peoples weak points.

Writing Feedback / Similarities of Love and Jealousy in today's society - Dreaded Shakespear [42]

By the way I assume you're British since you suggested that I start with a quote, but my teacher said never do this.I'm from Canada.

My new topic sentence is "When people are in love the emotions felt are very unique, but the power of love can sometimes make man do crazy things."

Writing Feedback / Similarities of Love and Jealousy in today's society - Dreaded Shakespear [42]

Thank you very much!

When I have my body paragraph up I will post it.