Undergraduate / Determination and Success - Havard essay [7]

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DETERMINATION & SUCCESS

Some call it stubbornness but I call it determination.
Everyone is driven by his or her own determination to succeed, such as the determination to be outstanding among others. This determination is an innate quality hidden in our soul, which can only come to surface when an event irks it. This quality is not divinely imprinted on our souls; rather it is a reflection of our values taught us by society and those who are an integral part in forming our character.

Making reference to a Novel; Congo by Micheal Crichton which shows the determination portrayed by several two characters of which are Karen Ross and Peter Elliot.

Karen Ross, a twenty four year old girl, was driven by her determination to go to Congo in search of the IIb diamonds. However she wasn't allowed by Travis and when the other team sent out on the expedition were brutally killed by some unknown creature. Her determination was triggered to the surface and this determination was what made her outstanding among the others in the team sent out on the second expedition. She faced so many challenges with her team but she never gave up. Recalling an event when the Mukenko volcano was about to erupt; she was warned to leave the site with her team but she refused to leave because she was determined to get the type IIb diamond.

This determination is also reflected in Peter Eliot who works with a Gorrila Amy, when Amy started having nightmares and drawing moon like crescent shape which is similar to that of an ancient brittle page of a Portuguese print dating as far back to 1642(a drawing of the Lost city of Zinj); he was determined to get through the misery of Amy's painting.

These determinations portrayed by these two characters is defined by their success and the journeys they both embarked upon to effectuate their goals.
Determination was a trait that got them through the battles, the late nights attacks from the Gray Gorrilas , the dangerous effect of the volcanic eruption , it was a trait that undeniably led them to their survival.

They both look toward a seemingly dangerous personal goal but they triumph over adversity, these characters evolve and emerge with a degree of accomplishment.
To achieve the goals and dreams that these two young role models held- that everyone holds including myself, determination was the key to fufill them.

Applying to College this year seems like a dangerous personal goal, facing so many challenges both from my father and financially. All these challenges were just a blessing in disguise, because it only made my determination stronger acting as a stepping stone .

I am most recently confronted by this determination when Father told me not to apply to colleges this year.Embedded in my mind is that Success comes from determination, so I must apply to college this year to reveal what I want to accomplish and not just a college but a place where people determination to excel is cherished and honoured. I have also had the dictum "determination is the key" pounded in my head by my mother, which is what drives me so hard to be successful just like her.