Undergraduate / Amazing student to faculty ratio and many other reasons - what great at Swarthmore [4]

Hey @Amatis250, overall, I hear your message and your palpable passion comes through. Although I do have some suggestions that can refine your essay.

Firstly, your starting sentence is unbelievably long. Maybe something like the following:

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Also, just my two cents, but I'd really advise adding specificity to your essay. I get you're attracted by swarthmore's encouragement of independent creative projects, but why? Have you undertaken such projects before? What is it about specifically about Swarthmore that encourages such initiative?

I understand it's incredibly hard to cram everything you love about the school, but what really helped me is focussing on one aspect and driving it throughout as a microcosm of what you like. That way you demonstrate 'fit', passion, and intensive research with specificity rather than ambiguous statements that can be drawn to many schools.

You're on the right track; I'm sure you'll be able to come up with a solid essay!

Good luck!

Essays / Rochester Supplement on applying my powers to 'things needed to be done.' [6]

Since it's a 100 words, just offer a small glimpse onto how you properly apply your powers in the things needed to be done.

i.e. what are your powers? how do you use them? what are your 'things needed to be done' in your family, community, etc? Keep it brief and focus on one aspect to make your point.