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Name: Marcus Sim
Joined: Jan 2, 2017
Last Post: Jan 7, 2017
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From: malaysia
School: Bukit jalil sports school

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marcusimwj   
Jan 2, 2017
Undergraduate / A timid boy living in own comfort zone. Changes made opportunities to achieve a lot more. [17]

Common application essay Reflect on a time when you challenged a belief or idea.

good things happen to people that allow changes in life



Growing up in a small town in Malaysia, I was always a timid boy living in my comfort zone. I don't usually like to explore and experience new things. Until when I turn nine, I started to pick squash as recreation. Because of my dad inspired me to choose the sport. My dad plays squash at the local club and l usually follow him there every evening. One day, I just randomly pick up his racket and enter the court to hit some balls. The coach invited me to training the next day. And, that's how my life started to change gradually.

I still remember I couldn't really sleep that night because I was excited for training the next day. I woke up early the next day to get ready. After breakfast, I went straight to the courts for practice. At first I struggle to hit the ball. After countless attempt, I started to be better in it. Started from training twice weekly, I eventually train daily. I couldn't really imagine myself being so competitive in squash because I am not good at overcoming obstacles. I am a person that tends to give up easily when facing challenges. I started to be obsessed with squash. I started to set goals for myself to achieve. Everything went smoothly, I won number of state title continuously. I slowly have a vision to take squash as my career.

I move out of my hometown to a sports school in Kuala Lumpur at the age of 15. It was tough to make this decision because I had to leave home at this young age and my parents were worried. But, I decided to take the step forward because I was very sure that is what I need to do. I train hard and stay discipline throughout the year in the sports school. I told myself that I need to take things seriously if I want to be successful. In 2014, I represented Malaysia in the Commonwealth Youth Games and won a gold medal. When I stepped on the podium during the prize ceremony event, I was extremely proud to be able to contribute for my country. All the time that I spent on court training and the sacrifices that I made had finally paid off.

Sometimes good things happen to people that allow changes in life. Living independently, taught me a lot of lifelong lessons that bring massive changes in my life. I became more mature in thinking and wiser in decision making. I am not regretting making this decision otherwise I will not have gained a lot of experience if I did not push myself to the limit. Moreover, I learn to adapt all situation so I will be able continue achieving greater things in life. And that is something I am carrying with me into my future: the ability to allow changes in my life, and sometimes just be open to new ideas. I may surprise myself by discovering I can do much more than I thought possible.
marcusimwj   
Jan 4, 2017
Undergraduate / A timid boy living in own comfort zone. Changes made opportunities to achieve a lot more. [17]

Growing up in a small town in Malaysia, I was always a timid boy living in my comfort zone. I don't usually like to explore and experience new things. Until when I turn nine, I started to pick squash as recreation. My dad plays squash at the local club and l usually follow him there every evening. One day, I just randomly pick up his racket and enter the court to hit some balls. The coach invited me to training the next day. And, that's how my life started to change gradually. On the first day of training I struggle to hit the ball. But after countless attempt, I started to be better in it. From training twice weekly, I eventually take the sports seriously and started to train every day. I started to obsessed with squash and set goals for myself to achieve.

I move out from my hometown to a sports school at the age of 15. It was tough to make this decision because I have to leave home at this young age. My parents were worried that I wouldn't be able juggle sports and studies at the same time by living independently. But, I decided to take the step forward because I was very sure that I want to pursue squash as a career. At the beginning, I almost couldn't cope with studies because of the training workload. After training, I would need to rush for class. Most of the time I was falling asleep in class because I was exhausted from training. I realize that my academics were slacking and that's when I am aware that I need to buck up my studies. I took up tuition every weekend and also sacrifice my leisure time to do extra revision. I knew that education is still important even though I want to do well in sports. My grades started to improve rapidly, I was delighted that I was able to manage my time efficiently to do well in both.

Getting out of my comfort zone really allow me to see the real world. I learned that in order to success we need to work hard to achieve it. Studying in the sports school also allow me to grow and see things with a different perspective. My determination and perseverance allow me to conquer adversity.

Sometimes good things happen to (...) I can do much more than I thought possible.

Hi @Holt. What should i add in the 3 paragraph ? I'm not sure if this is a better version. Or can my current version answer prompt 1 which is "Some students have a background, identity, interest, or talent that is so meaningful they believe their application would be incomplete without it. If this sounds like you, then please share your story."

Thanks !
marcusimwj   
Jan 4, 2017
Undergraduate / A timid boy living in own comfort zone. Changes made opportunities to achieve a lot more. [17]

Hi @Holt. This is my last paragraph. Do you think this make sense ?

Getting out of my comfort zone really allow me to see the real world. I learned that in order to success we need to work hard to achieve it. Studying in the sports school also allow me to grow and see things with a different perspective. My determination and perseverance allow me to conquer adversity. Living independently, taught me a lot of lifelong lessons that bring massive changes in my life. I became more mature in thinking and wiser in decision making. Moreover, I learn to adapt all situation so I will be able continue achieving greater things in life. And that is something I am carrying with me into my future: the ability to allow changes in my life, and sometimes just be open to new ideas. I may surprise myself by discovering I can do much more than I thought possible.
marcusimwj   
Jan 6, 2017
Undergraduate / 5th December: The day that I will never forget. [5]

Hi, i think you should elaborate more on your story that how your family inspired you to help people and how it actually make an impact in your life.
marcusimwj   
Jan 6, 2017
Essays / Rochester Supplement on applying my powers to 'things needed to be done.' [6]

During my high school year, my class visited a Children Orphanage . When we first arrived , we handed out gifts to the children. We also entertained the kids with outdoor activities. It just made my day when I watched the kids have fun. The smile on the children's face is priceless. I felt delighted to be able to make positive impact in someone's life. By helping the less fortunate, I will be able to inspire other people to spread positive vibes and bring unity in people so that we can make this world a peaceful place to live in.

this is my version. hope you will be able to gain some ideas from here
marcusimwj   
Jan 6, 2017
Undergraduate / Your 'ability to do' will appear in other parts of this application. The 'things needed to be done.' [3]

Your 'ability to do' will appear in other parts of this application. Please illustrate here how you properly apply your powers to 'things needed to be done.' The Rochester region and its University enroll, employ, and foster independent thinkers who create positive change in their communities. In seeking to join them, show us how you approach this ideal in your own life, family, and/or community.- 100 words

Below is my written essay. comment if this is ready to use.

The view of kids' happiness just made my day



During my high school year, my class visited a Children Orphanage . When we first arrived , we handed out gifts to the children. We also entertained the kids with outdoor activities. It just made my day when I watched the kids have fun. The smile on the children's face is priceless. I felt delighted to be able to make positive impact in someone's life. By helping the less fortunate, I will be able to inspire other people to spread positive vibes and bring unity in people so that we can make this world a peaceful place to live in.
marcusimwj   
Jan 7, 2017
Undergraduate / A timid boy living in own comfort zone. Changes made opportunities to achieve a lot more. [17]

Growing up in a small town in Malaysia, I was always a timid boy living in my comfort zone. I don't usually like to explore and experience new things until when I turned nine. I started to pick squash as recreation. My dad plays squash and he inspired me to choose the sport because I was able to spend more time with him. One day, I just randomly pick up his racket and entered the court to hit some balls. The coach invited me to training the next day. And, that's how my life started to change gradually. On the first day of training I struggled to hit the ball. But after countless attempts, I started to be better in it. From training twice weekly, I eventually took the sports seriously and started regular training. I started to fall in love with the sport because I was able to release my stress by hitting the ball. I started to get obsessed with squash and set goals for myself to achieve.

I move out from my hometown to a sports school at the age of 15. It was tough to make this decision because I have to leave home at this young age. My parents were supportive but at the same time they were worried that I wouldn't be able juggle sports and studies at the same time by living independently. They know that I have great passion for squash so they encourage me to give myself the chance to pursue my dream. I decided to take the step forward and trust myself to give my best. At the beginning, I almost couldn't cope with studies because of the training workload. The training is exhausted it makes me feel like taking a nap after every training session. However after training, I would need to rush for class. Most of the time I fell asleep in class because I was exhausted from training. I realized that my academics were slacking and that's when I also warned myself that I need to buck up my studies. I took up tuition every weekend and also sacrifice my leisure time to do extra revision. I knew that education is still important even though I want to do well in sports. My grades started to improve rapidly, I was delighted that I was able to manage my time efficiently to do well in both. My classroom environment really pushed me to study hard because all of the students were not only serious able they sports, they were highly motivated to study too.

Getting out of my comfort zone really allowed me to see the real world. I learned that in order to attain success we need to work hard . Studying in the sports school also allowed me to grow and see things with a different perspective. My parents were really happy that they send me to the sports school because I became a responsible person. My determination and perseverance allow me to conquer adversity. Living independently, taught me a lot of lessons that brought massive changes in my life. I became more mature in thinking and wiser in decision making. Moreover, I learnt to adapt to all situation so I will be able continue achieving greater things in life. And that is something I am carrying with me into my future: the ability to allow changes in my life, and sometimes just be open to new ideas. I may surprise myself by discovering I can do much more than I thought was possible.

Hi @Holt. This is the newly updated one
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