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Name: HUI YEE
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Jan 14, 2017
Scholarship / If you are smart, you'll always be humble. NTU scholarship essay [7]

Hi guys, I'm applying to ntu. Please give some comments to my essay. Kindly inform me if there is any grammar mistake. Thank you very much!

Describe, in less than 300 words, the values and beliefs you hold strongly to. Please provide examples of how you have demonstrated these in your actions.

be humble



If you are smart, you'll always be humble. You can learn all you want, there'll always be somebody who's never read a book who'll know twice what you know.

-David Duchovny
I don't judge people by their appearance, economic status or education background. I always want to get to know all the people I have met in my life as everyone has good values I need to learn. I would try to interact with all my classmate in my primary and secondary school. Humility makes me blend into the community easily. I will not look down people who do not study well as talent cannot be defined by exam. Different people may be an expert in various field like arts or sport. It is impossible for me to learn all the knowledge but I can learn as much as I can if I humble myself to ask for help. When I was doing my part time job, I had learnt all the things from my junior who always helped out in the book shop.

I was the vice-president of Chinese Orchestra Society in my secondary school. I will listen to the advice and suggestion given by the members and advisor. Besides, I will swallow my pride and dare to admit when I did something wrong. Therefore, I got along well with the committee and always completed our task in time.

People will forgive your shortcomings easily if you treat them well. I always treat others well. I will not lose my temper easily when there is a conflict with my friends. Treat others as you wish to be treated, our life will be better if we put ourselves in others shoes.
ellyyee   
Jan 14, 2017
Scholarship / If you are smart, you'll always be humble. NTU scholarship essay [7]

@Holt
@Knockout
@Streetwalker
Thank you for your valuable comments. I have tried to revise my essay. Here's the essay.

"Can you teach me the steps for stock taking?" I asked my junior. "Of course. Let's have a look at the storage before we start the stock take." replied my junior. I was working part time in my school's bookstore, I had many to learn from my junior who has been helping out there for some time. Most of them were retained student, but there were the one who taught me a lot.

I don't judge people by their appearance, economic status or education background. I always try to get to know all the people I have met in my life as everyone has good values that I need to learn. I will try to interact with all my classmates in my primary and secondary school. Humility helps me to blend into the community easily. I will not look down on people who do not study well as talents cannot be determined by examinations. Those whose academic results are mediocre may be an expert in other fields like arts or sports. It is impossible for me to learn all the knowledge but I can learn as much as I can if I humble myself to learn from others.

For example, I was the vice-president of Chinese Orchestra Society in my secondary school. I would accept the advice and suggestions given by my members and advisors. Besides, I would swallow my pride and dare to admit my wrongdoings. Therefore, I got along well with the committee members and always completed our task in time.

Staying humble helps me to treat others well. People will easily forgive your shortcomings if you forgive theirs and treat them well. I will always be humble in order to improve myself and become better.
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