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Apr 13, 2017
Writing Feedback / The percentage of students who studied at four types of secondary schools over a period of ten years [4]
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The table illustrates the percentage of students who studied at four types of secondary schools over a period of ten years.
Overall, community schools welcomed more and more pupils from 2000 to 2009. In contrast, the increasre was a reduction in the number of students in other secondary schools.
There was a swift increase in the quantity of students attending community schools between 2000 and 2009. In 2000, only 12% of teenagers were educated at these schools, and five years later almost a third of them took courses here. It is interesting to mention that the proportion of learners jumped nearly five times in 2009.
In comparison with community schools, there was a mild fall in the total of schoolchilds in specialist schools although both of these schools started at the same level, at 12%. From 2000 to 2009, the quantity of pupils that talented secondary schools received declined by 1%. Others such as grammar schools and voluntary-controlled schools took a significant decrease in the total of children. Twice as many adolesents were taught at grammar schools in 2000 compared to 2009. The figure for voluntary-controlled ones also fell by 18% at the same stage.
Please comment, I need your correction on my writing. Thank you very much.
community schools and their students
The table illustrates the percentage of students who studied at four types of secondary schools over a period of ten years.
Overall, community schools welcomed more and more pupils from 2000 to 2009. In contrast, the increasre was a reduction in the number of students in other secondary schools.
There was a swift increase in the quantity of students attending community schools between 2000 and 2009. In 2000, only 12% of teenagers were educated at these schools, and five years later almost a third of them took courses here. It is interesting to mention that the proportion of learners jumped nearly five times in 2009.
In comparison with community schools, there was a mild fall in the total of schoolchilds in specialist schools although both of these schools started at the same level, at 12%. From 2000 to 2009, the quantity of pupils that talented secondary schools received declined by 1%. Others such as grammar schools and voluntary-controlled schools took a significant decrease in the total of children. Twice as many adolesents were taught at grammar schools in 2000 compared to 2009. The figure for voluntary-controlled ones also fell by 18% at the same stage.
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