dilink
Apr 18, 2017
Writing Feedback / Future IELTS exam preparation. The graph compares the number of visits to two new music sites on web [3]
Hello everyone,
This is my first writing task 1 to prepare for Ielts exam in the future. I hope you can help me to review it. Thank you very much
The line graph shows data about how many people visited two new music websites namely Music Choice and Pop Parade.
Overall, the number of visitors of both sites fluctuated over the period of 15 days. Although the two trends were similar in terms of a general increase, the number of people accessing to Pop Parade site in most days was higher than that of Music Choice.
In the first nine days, there was a gradual decline in the number of people visiting the Pop Parade, from nearly 120 people in the first day to only 40 people in the ninth day. However, the figure for Pop Parade rose sharply to about 150 visitors in the eleventh day before dropping to exactly 80 people for thirteenth day. Pop Parade finally gained approximately 170 visits over the 15-day period.
Over the same period, the number of visitors of the Music Choice varied less significantly than on the Pop Parade. It started with 40 people for the first day, and there was no noticeable change during eleven days. The figure for Music Choice increased dramatically from more than 20 people to 120 people after a brief interval of one day. That figure then fell to about 80 visitors by the fifteenth day.
Hello everyone,
This is my first writing task 1 to prepare for Ielts exam in the future. I hope you can help me to review it. Thank you very much
Music Choice and Pop Parade visitors
The line graph shows data about how many people visited two new music websites namely Music Choice and Pop Parade.
Overall, the number of visitors of both sites fluctuated over the period of 15 days. Although the two trends were similar in terms of a general increase, the number of people accessing to Pop Parade site in most days was higher than that of Music Choice.
In the first nine days, there was a gradual decline in the number of people visiting the Pop Parade, from nearly 120 people in the first day to only 40 people in the ninth day. However, the figure for Pop Parade rose sharply to about 150 visitors in the eleventh day before dropping to exactly 80 people for thirteenth day. Pop Parade finally gained approximately 170 visits over the 15-day period.
Over the same period, the number of visitors of the Music Choice varied less significantly than on the Pop Parade. It started with 40 people for the first day, and there was no noticeable change during eleven days. The figure for Music Choice increased dramatically from more than 20 people to 120 people after a brief interval of one day. That figure then fell to about 80 visitors by the fifteenth day.
writing_bai_1.png