Posts by tran le hai anh

tran le hai anh

Jun 23, 2017

Writing Feedback / [Ielts task 2] Education's effectiveness in leading people to a healthy eating habit [5]

Hi @thien_my ! =))

@Holt is alright.
I am myself not really excel at English but I think you should check these out:

Did you mean "researchers" or "researchs" instead of "researches"?
"consuming" not "consumming"
"technology" not "techonology"
"Moreover" not "Morever"
"beneficial" not "benificial"
"convenience" not "convinience", sorry if these are just typing mistakes
To avoid these blunders, I highly recommend you use Grammarly. It also said that "It appears that the quantifier the amount does not fit with the plural countable noun calories. Consider changing it (into a number of)", I'm not sure whether it's right or not.

"In fact, there are many other factors rather than nutrition to beconcerned when one ~~have~~ has to choose between processed food and a healthier choice."

The second explanation sentence in your first body paragraph seems doesn't clear. It's about how attractive junk food is or the advertising? And the two sentences seem to be two examples rather.

About the second body paragraph, I feel so confused. It seems not clear. It seems doesn't have any example, and the second reason seems doesn't explain anything clearly.

Lastly, I think you should have one more graph for your opinion.

That's what I think. If there's anything inaccurate, please tell me

And if you're free, please check my work. Thanks in advance!

Have a nice day! =))

tran le hai anh

Jun 29, 2017

Writing Feedback / IELTS task 2: Protecting architectural heritage [4]

Thanks for taking the time to read this! If you pleased, show me every mistake you find =)) I'll be very grateful for any help you guys can give me with this :3

Topic: Most governments use public funds to try to protect their architectural heritage in some way.
Is this a good use of public money in your view?
Which kind of old buildings should be preserved and how should they be used?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

preserving architectural heritage

(1) In many countries in the world, public money is mostly used for preserving architectural heritage in different ways. (2) In my opinion, these funds are being spent effectively by this way. (3) Old buildings such as historical buildings should be protected and turned into wonderful places for learning and visiting so that we can gain appropriate benefits from them.

(4) Personally speaking, using public funds for architectural heritage preservation is accurate as the society can take numerous advantages from this. (5) First of all, these historical buildings, palaces, shrines,... are striking proofs for past lives and buildings. (6) For example, before cameras were invented, there is no way to show how a life of a king was during his age. (7) However, with his castle and exhibits, researchers can build up assumptions. (8) The second considerable benefit of preserving architectural heritage is for tourism. (9) In my country, every year, Hue welcomes thousands of visitors to its ancient capital, which contributes greatly to the province's income.

(10) Among distinct types of old buildings, I suggest preserving historical one as a studying and attraction spot. (11) This is because, along with tourism purpose, old houses and palaces surviving throughout time, witnessing the country's important events are huge material for both students and researchers. (12) Schools can use them for practical history lessons, which help children to learn more effectively.

(13) To sum up, spending public money for protecting architectural heritages is a brilliant choice of most governments in the world. (14) Besides, I think we should concern more about preserving historical buildings, turn them into visiting and learning areas in order to get the best out of them.