Writing Feedback / Underappreciated home nurses in California [2]

this is what I have so far for my introduction paragraph

nurses deserve more

In California today Nursing home nurses are underappreciated. They care for our elderly with love and respect. Many times they are only ones there to comfort them because their family is at work or can not provide the health care they need at home. They deserve more respect because they care for our loved ones. They treat them with love and respect like if they where one of their own family members. A nursing home licensed nurses in California deserve more respect because they work long hours and sacrifice their health.

my paper is about why society should recognise its cultural worth how we can appreciate it more?