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Name: Advait
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Last Post: Sep 10, 2017
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School: Dr. Kalmadi Shamrao Highschool

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AdwaitM   
Sep 10, 2017
Writing Feedback / Cement manufacturing. Essay about diagrams. English learner. [4]

I like the concise way you have put it.
A few points where I felt you could be clearer:
THE GIVEN DIAGRAMS DEPICTS .... are you sure that this is the purpose of construction?

It should be ' Limestone and clay are crushed into powder'

THE PROCEDURES NEED 5 AND 1 ...
It is better to form separate sentences as it makes reading and understanding easy.
AdwaitM   
Sep 10, 2017
Undergraduate / Stanford Supplement - Letter to Roommate from campus - self introduction [2]

Please provide valuable feedback on this essay.

Topic:Virtually all of Stanford's undergraduates live on campus. Write a note to your future roommate that reveals something about you or that will help your roommate-and us-know you better

rommates for the next four years



Hello Future Roommate,
I am sure you will be curious about your new roommate.
A few basics: My name is Advait Mulay, which I know is tough on your larynx. I am from India and am a bit of an introvert (until I get to know you) and I will be living in dorms for the first time in my life.

I am open to discussion on any topic under the sun, from climate change to the new Star Wars movie. Speaking of movies, I am a huge movie buff. Any movie, right from animated ones to war movies are cool with me.

I have a few quirks like most people do. For instance, I tend to burst into songs at totally random moments. So don't be alarmed if you hear a few bars of Indian songs deep into the night. I am a night person. So don't be surprised to see me crawl into bed after completing a paper or a really thick novel on a Sunday morning. I must also inform you that I am a sloppy guy. Do not be overwhelmed by the mess of books, clothes and pizza boxes. Another thing I must warn you about is the relentless barrage of corny and weak jokes you will have to endure whenever we are in the same room. As you may have observed, I am quite adaptable and do not mind sprouts instead of cheeseburgers. So I am not very concerned about any odd habits you may have.I assure you that I will be a helpful and cooperative roommate and hopefully you will be the same.

I am really looking forward to meeting you in person. Here is to the hope that we can keep the fun alive for the next four years.

Advait.
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