Scholarship / Essay for USEFP 2018 undergraduate semester exchange program. Why you didn't accept my essay [4]

Ushna, What @Holt said is the truth. Your essay might have valid points but the structure and lack of synchronization is what really made it to seem horrible. i believe that if you follow his guidelines, you will definitely come up with something better.

Please don't give up.

@Holt,

Thanks for the pointer.
I picked up one or two things from your writeup

Scholarship / I find networking very easy and enjoyable - Chevening writing [5]

Lauretta,

Though I may not be a guru but i think your first paragraph is not well structured to catch someones attention thereby propelling him to read the remaining part of your essay.

Your closure is perfect and simple. I believe that you should work on your opening paragraph.

@ Holt, Please your attention is needed for an honest and unbiased review of this essay.