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Jan 5, 2018
Scholarship / Write a reference letter for yourself in the third person describing yourself. Scholarship essay [4]
"He is the only student in his year ..."
Maybe try making this into two sentences?
"Saifuddeen is a beast in our basketball team. He was awarded the most improved player last year, and he truly was."
I would suggest saying something like "certainly deserved the exceptional award" or something along those lines.
Not sure if the word "beast" is appropriate in a scholarship essay
I feel like you're on the right track, but as you said, you probably need better word choice.
"He is the only student in his year ..."
Maybe try making this into two sentences?
"Saifuddeen is a beast in our basketball team. He was awarded the most improved player last year, and he truly was."
I would suggest saying something like "certainly deserved the exceptional award" or something along those lines.
Not sure if the word "beast" is appropriate in a scholarship essay
I feel like you're on the right track, but as you said, you probably need better word choice.