Posts by hanabanana

hanabanana

Feb 22, 2018

Letters / Recommendation Letter by Mentor in University for A Scholarship Application [4]

Hi all! Please help me review this recommendation letter that my mentor wrote for me for a scholarship application. She sent me a draft, which I have edited in terms of grammar and sentence structure. However, I need input on the content itself before I send it back to her for signature.

many fine qualities

To Whom It May Concern,

It is with much enthusiasm that I recommend Hana Xxxx for the inclusion in your Scholarship Program.

I am writing to tell you of the many fine qualities of Hana, whom I have known for five (5) years in various capacities. I was Hana's mentor for multiple art projects during her study at the University of Xxxx. Hana displayed a level of creativity, wit, and analytical thought that is quite rare among her peers.

I have had the chance to get to know her when she spent much of her time volunteering for the gallery and museum as well as the faculty and I say without a doubt that you are dealing with a person of very good moral character. She operates with integrity, and never has a bad word to say about anyone. She is also hard working and dedicated, and never leaves a job unfinished.

Hana's academic strengths are complemented by her demonstrated leadership skills - she was among the few students who founded the yearly event for university art exhibition for two years and served as lead designer for the exhibition. She also volunteered for two years in the University of Xxxx Art Gallery.

On a personal level, I may just say that I really like her, and I have no doubts about her abilities to succeed in the future. I believe I am in the perfect position to evaluate her strengths and weaknesses outside the working environment, and with those in mind, I can easily recommend her without reservation.

Please let me know if I can provide any more information to strengthen Hana's candidacy for your Scholarship Program. She has a very special spark, and I trust she will go far in making our world a better place.

Sincerely,

Xxxx
Curator and Museum Educator
University of Xxxx

hanabanana

Feb 22, 2018

Scholarship / What it means to me? Essay on Leadership and influence - question for Chevening Fellowship [8]

Mohit, as far as I know, Chevening is asking for leadership examples in professional settings. Therefore, in my opinion the examples you put about cricket and hostel mess are not applicable. The last 3 paragraphs are all great examples though, but you should tie those experiences with how you would apply your leadership qualities in the scholarship program as well as in your future endeavors.

hanabanana

Feb 22, 2018

Scholarship / KGSP - is a big opportunity to start over, when you think that life is over [7]

Svetlana, I think it would be more appropriate to talk about your professional and academic achievements in relation to the scholarship and masters program, instead of the personal story. With all due respect, what you have gone through with the loss of your mother is tough, but in my opinion it is not helpful for a scholarship statement. If you insist on including this story, perhaps you could write about how it drives you to work harder to pursue further studies, though it shouldn't be the main point or the introduction of your essay.

hanabanana

Feb 22, 2018

Undergraduate / Hook em' Horns! Statement of Purpose - transfer into UT Austin essay [3]

Max, I don't think it's helpful to describe yourself as "immature towards education" as it gives a negative vibe and portrays you as uninterested in your education. If you want to explain your decrease in GPA, you should talk more about the challenges you faced and your reasons to decide to focus on your extracurricular activities. Maybe describe what you learned and experienced in those extracurricular activities instead. Put a positive spin to it.