Undergraduate / Studying a new yet similar branch to my previous one - motivation letter [4]

Hello everyone:
first I would like to thank you for this great service and website...
I will enclose this motivation letter with my documents in my visa application in the German consulate soon, it is not final yet, any comments and opinions are so appreciated, i am applying for a major that is similar to one I have previously studied but didn't finish,

I have included my story in the motivation letter. They just require a motivation letter and no further prompts were mentioned.
I have put some sentences between brackets for the possibility to delete them in order to make the essay shorter.

Visa application Germany

Dear sir:
I am writing to apply for a long-term student visa for Germany in order to pursue my education in Computer science/Buisness information at Clausthal University of Technology.

My interest in applied science dates back to my childhood period.As I was raised in a family that believes in science,during every summer, I enrolled in courses in computer-related topics.In school, I had the desire to discover new-born fields so I was attracted IT to subjects.During high school,I had a passion towards electronics physics and mathematics, and I got the total mark in physics subject and high scores in other scientific ones. All these experiences were paving my way to my prospective career of becoming an engineer.That's why after a lot of hard work,I graduated with high a GPA that let me to enter the faculty of electrical and electronic engineering in Aleppo university.

While an undergraduate studying communication engineering in the faculty, I have taken not only courses in the field of communication engineering, but also those related to computer science in which I excelled like:C++ ,Algorithms and data structures and neural networks.I got to know the great deal that computer science has to do with my major and I considered this connection a probable subject for master degree. As I proceeded in my studies,and in response to my arising curiosity I enrolled in private courses in topics that are mutual between communication and computer science like computer networks. I got fascinated by the fact that the transformation of society is closely linked to current developments in communications and information technology, such as the Internet, multimedia and 4G wireless. I was fueled by a desire to contribute to the development of my country's technology in its bright prospect future.

My enthusiasm for knowledge was repelled by the erupting war whose onset dates back to seven years. In my college, a lot of the university's best professors has traveled, I was also deprived of an important stage in my study which is the internship, in which the engineer gets mixed with the practicality of the companies. I was on the brink of graduation when situations reached the point where I had to leave Syria after the persistence of electricity cuts and being displaced because my house was bombed. With my lack of practical experience my discontinued study profile,however,I was determined on moving forward to complete my

scientific career abroad, (Turkey was the most likely destination to travel .
After learning Turkish to a certain extent, I joined a Turkish university, but that university did not reach my ambitions. After doing researches and discussions with most of my colleagues, I found that Turkish universities are not comparable with the level of German or European universities in general.)

(I want to take a step further in my undergraduate studies and move to a country where theory and practice are combined to produce a world-class education,a place where brilliant minds cooperate to take the concept of education to the next level,that's when I thought of Germany.)

I got to know more about Germany's education system first by my brother who is studying in one of Germany's universities,he reported to me the high quality of education and the well-equipped laboratories in his university. After doing my research, I felt inclined to choose Germany because it's one of the pioneers in the field of computer science.Moreover,living and breathing the international atmosphere and integrating with English and German speaking people in order to develop a third language is undoubtedly one of the motivations for studying in a country as multicultural as Germany.

I seek to deepen my knowledge and develop my skills in computer science in regard to my previous study, that's what encouraged me to pick the computer science program of TU Clausthal. It is a unique program in Germany which offers the opportunity to choose a main focus from according to the main fields of Computer Science,(then a certain area of specialization can be chosen from alongside with many others within that main focus accordingly,which led me to) an interdisciplinary specialization that integrates computer engineering with my previous knowledge.This program which has more than one internship that makes it close to industry,stands as an unprecedented opportunity for me to further hone my abilities and compensate for the practical experience that I missed during my existence in Syria .

I believe that Syria now more than any other time requires a skilled and high qualified scientists and engineers to contribute to its rebuilding, that's why for now my long term goal is to become a prominent professional in the IT industry in my country and work towards its development and rebuilding.

In conclusion I am confident that TU Clausthal is the right place for me to earn the knowledge and exposure to be that engineer with international experience ready to return to Syria after the war ends,as well it will help me achieve me goals and attainment in life.

(I didn't mention why I chose this university, I still can if somebody can refer to its importance)

thanks.