Undergraduate / The Tense Tour Guide (Short Answer for Common App) [4]

Hi! The following essay is my draft of the Commom App short answer...

Please elaborate on one of your activities (extracurricular, personal activities, or work experience)(150 words or fewer).

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I still didn't understand the motivation that brought my words "Let me introduce the east campus" during a meeting of volunteers in Huazhong University of Science and Technology, to receive visiting students from Taiwan. Therefore, the repercussions of that self-promotion involved exhausting research and recitation on campus resorts materials and industrious imitation of a decent 'tour guide'...

On that day, the initial hesitating self-introduction wasn't my 'at-ease-inducer' at all, yet it apparently served as a 'laugh-provoker' for the visitors! I suddenly found myself standing among peers whose vivacity - travestying my dialect - overwhelmed my constant tension. 'Why make the circumstance so formal and rigid?' I asked myself, which is when the former 'tour guide' discarded his title merely to become an accommodating companion. And that companion, excluding mechanical repetition, told anecdotes and hence made many laugh. Watching the growth of this companion, I gradually understand the whys of my original temerity.

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It's exactly 150 words. OMG...!

Any advice is welcome. Thank U all in advance!