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Rudi Nirwantono   
Oct 19, 2018
Writing Feedback / Writing IELTS Task 1 : Process of Chocolate [2]

3th sentese:
The first is manual process which usually use(s) a farmer skill and secondly processed by machine and tool --> both of them are not in parallel manner. You're able to start by using "Starting by/Initiating by ....."). Blue = subject verb agreement (plural & singular)

Suggestion:
The first is manual process which usually use a depending on (reduction come from which depends on) farmer skill and secondly the second is processed by machine and tool machinery processing.

4th sentence:
All of process the processes have 10 stages from growing up to producing liquid chocolate
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