Writing Feedback / Ielts task 2: many people try to look younger than their age, causes and opinion [3]

This is very well written! My only issues were with the first sentence and your choice of the word "awesome" within the first paragraph.
If it were me, I would just cut out "It is true..." and just start with "people are trying to change their body image in order to appear younger."

Secondly, the word "awesome" is extremely overused and thus has lost complete meaning. I would use something like "beautiful" or "unique" instead.

Good job!!! :)