Undergraduate / hopefully it is crazy enough to work ... penn state personal statement [9]

ehhhh not good my friend. I understand your strive for originality, but first of all, dont actually make it so distinctive (i doubt that you....in a personal statement) Admission officers will look at it and think it's dumb. Second of all, I hope your planning on making this gramatically correct. (Try starting sentences off with capital letters)Third of all, just get rid of this whole statement. You wont be bringing any diversity once your not admitted. Good luck to you. (I'm applying to Penn State UP btw)