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Feb 21, 2020
Writing Feedback / Ielts Writing Task 1: the distribution of employment among agriculture, services and industries [6]
The bar chart compares different countries in terms of their employment rate among agriculture, services and industries from 1980 and the estimated figures until 2020
Overall, the minority of job in agriculture is found in country A and C while country B makes up the highest figure in agriculture . The amount of job in services in all countries increase
In 1980, about two-thirds of agriculture employment were from country B. Nearly 40% of industry job went to country C whereas the figures for country A and B were slightly lower. Regarding services, country C accounted for around seven in ten of job, which was twice times as much as that of country B
In 2020, all countries are predicted to slowly rise in the amount of employment in services . By 2020, the propotion of agriculture job in country A and C will have remained unchanged, at roughtly 20% and just 5% respectively while country B is estimated to decrese by roughly 10% . The amount of industry job in country B is projected to grow to approximately 40% compared to 22% in country B. The figure for country A will decline from 30 to just over 20% in 2020
the comparison of three sectors of the economy
The bar chart compares different countries in terms of their employment rate among agriculture, services and industries from 1980 and the estimated figures until 2020
Overall, the minority of job in agriculture is found in country A and C while country B makes up the highest figure in agriculture . The amount of job in services in all countries increase
In 1980, about two-thirds of agriculture employment were from country B. Nearly 40% of industry job went to country C whereas the figures for country A and B were slightly lower. Regarding services, country C accounted for around seven in ten of job, which was twice times as much as that of country B
In 2020, all countries are predicted to slowly rise in the amount of employment in services . By 2020, the propotion of agriculture job in country A and C will have remained unchanged, at roughtly 20% and just 5% respectively while country B is estimated to decrese by roughly 10% . The amount of industry job in country B is projected to grow to approximately 40% compared to 22% in country B. The figure for country A will decline from 30 to just over 20% in 2020
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