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Name: Vinicius Bastos de Sousa
Joined: Jul 29, 2020
Last Post: Aug 24, 2020
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From: Brazil
School: Professor Marcos Uchôas dos Santos Penchel

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vbastos36   
Jul 29, 2020
Scholarship / GKS/KGSP Essay Study Plan Language (BEFORE and AFTER you come to Korea.) [2]

Please guys, can you give some feedback and help me improve this little "essay"?

PROMPT:

Study plans to improve foreign languages (Korean, English, etc) required for taking a bachelor's degree course.


BEFORE and AFTER you come to Korea.


- English Language: As I already have a certain level of proficiency in English, I plan to develop my skills even further during lectures and presentations held in English, both in my university and in the language center, as well with foreigners that I may encounter during my study stay.

BEFORE I GO TO KOREA
- Korean Language: I already started to learn the Hangul and its composition. Besides being a really hard task, since it is a totally new alphabet for me, I dedicate a certain time of my day to practice it and learn some words.

AFTER I GO TO KOREA
- Korean Language: During the first year of the intensive language program, I will dedicate most of my time to learn Korean outside the classes. I already searched for some methods to improve language-learning, and I plan to immerse myself in the Korean community and practice every day with some peers. I believe that this is the best way to learn some unknown language and to get a better grasp of other cultures
vbastos36   
Aug 20, 2020
Scholarship / The field of law - Motivation PERSONAL STATEMENT - KGSP [3]

@Moel

You should focus this essay on you. You did not give solid reasons that express why you want to be in Korea. Try to follow the guidelines to have a clearer picture of what you have to write. Show the motivations with which you apply for this program, give some family and education background, tell them some significant experiences you have had; risks you have taken and achievements you have made, persons or events that have had a significant influence on you. Also show the extracurricular activities such as club activities, community service activities or work experiences you had been part of.
vbastos36   
Aug 24, 2020
Scholarship / Question about Study Plan to improve foreign language for GKS undergraduate. Review needed. [4]

@ghufran839 I liked that you gave a lot of examples of what you do to improve both languages, however, it sounds a little bit choppy, try to expand a little more your description and give a nice conclusion to each sentence. Also, show how you will continue to develop your English skills in Korea, and try to show what resources you will use at your college to improve both languages.

And as you asked, I don't think it is a good idea to add headings like "BEFORE and AFTER", try to keep the text in an essay format.
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