Undergraduate / "Dreamers cannot be tamed." - Common Essay --Aiming for the elite colleges [5]

As for the grammatical errors you are looking for, I'd say there's practically none. However, there are other issues that are in need of improvement. Your word choices are completely off the marks at times. The fact you're abusing your thesaurus could be smelled from an ocean away. Seriously. Even if you're trying to show off your linguistic prowess, this is not the way to do so. Do not use words you normally wouldnt use (dont look up to the thesaurus blindly) because a trained eye can easily detect when a term is out of its place.