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Sep 1, 2020
Writing Feedback / IELTS Writing Task 1: people who visited four types of tourist attraction in Britain [5]
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The pie chart compares the proportions of individuals who visited 4 kinds of tourist attractions in the UK in1999 based on the results of a survey.
It can be told from the chart that majority of people in Britain visited Theme park, museums or galleries in 19999, while the figure for people who visited wildlife park and Zoos was the least.
The percentage of people who visited theme parks is the highest, at 38%. Among this group of people, nearly half of them chose to go to Blackpool Pleasure Beach. And percentages of those who went to Alton Towers and Pleasureland, Southport are 17% and 16% respectively. Apart form that, the figures for people who chose Chessington World of Adventures and Legoland, Windsor are identical, only 10%.
The figure for people who visited Museums and Galleries is the second highest, at 37%, while people who visited Historic houses and Monuments are 21% less. Finally, only 9% of individuals visited Wildlife Parks and Zoos.
Could you please kindly help review the grammar and give suggestions? Thanks in advance!
distribution of visitors in the pie chart
The pie chart compares the proportions of individuals who visited 4 kinds of tourist attractions in the UK in1999 based on the results of a survey.
It can be told from the chart that majority of people in Britain visited Theme park, museums or galleries in 19999, while the figure for people who visited wildlife park and Zoos was the least.
The percentage of people who visited theme parks is the highest, at 38%. Among this group of people, nearly half of them chose to go to Blackpool Pleasure Beach. And percentages of those who went to Alton Towers and Pleasureland, Southport are 17% and 16% respectively. Apart form that, the figures for people who chose Chessington World of Adventures and Legoland, Windsor are identical, only 10%.
The figure for people who visited Museums and Galleries is the second highest, at 37%, while people who visited Historic houses and Monuments are 21% less. Finally, only 9% of individuals visited Wildlife Parks and Zoos.
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