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Name: Vo Quynh Trang
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TrangVo_095   
Nov 11, 2020
Writing Feedback / The Internet is known as one of the greatest inventions as it is truly advantageous to human beings [7]

The advantages of Internet



The Internet is known as one of the greatest inventions in the modern world as it is truly advantageous to human beings in every aspect of life. Despite its disadvantages, people still prefer it because of the following benefits.

First of all, the Internet has changed how people communicate because the birth of emails and social networking applications such as Facebook, Whatsapp, Instagram .... have enabled people to contact each other faster and easier. Moreover, these applications are simple and convenient to use for people of all ages and backgrounds. Additionally, it is an enormous source of knowledge and information in all fields (life, work, study....). Also, it helps overcome geographical distance by offering learners online-course or applicants worldwide job sites. Last but not least, no one can not deny the amusement of it. Everyone, for example, just stays at home and enjoys the world through movies, music... which are easily found on the websites. Similarly, shopping online has reduced much customer's time and effort because of connected contribution and payment channels.

In summary, The Internet has become an indispensable part of human life because of how it connects people and accompanies us in working, learning, and even entertaining. Therefore, we had better make effective use of it; otherwise, its disadvantages may outweigh the supposed advantages.
TrangVo_095   
Nov 11, 2020
Writing Feedback / The Internet is known as one of the greatest inventions as it is truly advantageous to human beings [7]

@Holt
I appreciate your comment on my punctuation marks as well as sentence structures. I'll keep that in mind.

About the wrong prompt you pointed out, I just want to say that this is only a part of essay to show how I arrange ideas for advantages of the Internet and that's the reason why not the whole essay to give clear disscusion between the good and the bad sides of it. Also, I know the openinng and the concluding paragraph is a bit ambiguous.

So Can you give your feedback on the coherence and cohesion of my ideas about the advantages?

Thanks
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