Essays / How would SI Scholarship for studies in Sweden be valuable for the development of the applicant? [3]

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Human Resource system in our company is inattention for improving work culture. They only focus on personally for achieving the target with unbalanced characteristics leadership in all levels. For instance, lack of soft-skill training to improve or create characteristics of both organisation and personal behaviour. Laksmi is one of talent employee in our branch. She bravely to initiate to the management by providing creative ideas relating to the improving quality performance of human resource. I see her potential due to Laksmi is frequently to discuss with me regarding how to manage people and organisation. She is very curious in personally and wants to broaden her capability experiences and knowledge in the field of human resources issues. Unfortunately, in our company very occasionally to providing expert or tutor regarding improving affective domain. I highly recommend her to join to this scholarship due to I believe by studying in Sweden and collaboration with Swedish Institue scholarship will gain for her either international experiences and networking. I hopefully, nearly in the future, Laksmi could contribute by implementing Swedish work-culture and join collaboration with Swedish's companies through our management to create a healthy organisation and sustainability leadership.