lalit008
Oct 21, 2009
Undergraduate / "the best team in our district" - critique my short answer essay [7]
"Five!" "Four!" "Three!" "Two!" "One!" the buzzer sounded as the opposing team's crowd shouted in joy, and our stands stood in silence. We were shut-out by the best team in our district, sixty-two to zero. I walked to the fifty yard line, getting ready to shake their hands. As I walked past their fifty plus team, I shook all their hands, looking at them in the eye, and only saying "Good game", or "Great job". When I started playing football in junior high I only expected to get the superficial things out of it, like popularity and school-wide fame, but now that I reflect on those moments of happiness after a win, or sorrow after a loss, I realize those loses and wins taught me things that can't be taught by a person, like losing with pride, or winning with class, and regretting neither my or my team's mistakes.
"Five!" "Four!" "Three!" "Two!" "One!" the buzzer sounded as the opposing team's crowd shouted in joy, and our stands stood in silence. We were shut-out by the best team in our district, sixty-two to zero. I walked to the fifty yard line, getting ready to shake their hands. As I walked past their fifty plus team, I shook all their hands, looking at them in the eye, and only saying "Good game", or "Great job". When I started playing football in junior high I only expected to get the superficial things out of it, like popularity and school-wide fame, but now that I reflect on those moments of happiness after a win, or sorrow after a loss, I realize those loses and wins taught me things that can't be taught by a person, like losing with pride, or winning with class, and regretting neither my or my team's mistakes.
